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I can’t really differentiate the two that well, but here’s how I see it:
The fact that I needed two paragraphs for the melodrama story is kinda telling. It could possibly work if given more context. Maybe these wackos have legit reasons to go past the speed limit, but still. If you wanna tug more heartstrings, at least make them feel human.
What do you think?
Drama: Bob and Jill fight over text messages. Bob slams the door outside, starts the car, and Jill restrains herself from throwing a picture frame. Jill sits on the dining table, alone. They don’t talk for a week but still do their jobs. Then, they sit together in the living room at dawn. The kids wake up and hug both in bed. Tune in next episode.
Melodrama: Bob and Jill fight over text messages. Jill slaps Bob, and he throws the picture frame only to miss. Their screams worsen enough to awake the kids, and they hear regrets about marriage and resenting God. They see two cars revving outside.
Bob tailgates Jill past the speed limit, and a truck gets in the way. Bob screams her name, running outside in the rain. Police sirens drown the area, and he screams in tears while cradling her in his arms. Cue the credits rolling with Coldplay’s The Scientist.
The fact that I needed two paragraphs for the melodrama story is kinda telling. It could possibly work if given more context. Maybe these wackos have legit reasons to go past the speed limit, but still. If you wanna tug more heartstrings, at least make them feel human.
What do you think?