What do you think?

[Deleted member 68927]

So, I started a new novel. The Antique Shop. I have 50 chapters done for it, posted 8. I'd really like some feedback. Are the characters Mary Sue? They found jobs almost without looking, but I needed to move the story along. Did I rush it? Thank you for your time.

The Antique Shop

Andrew, an eighteen-year-old orphan, is fresh out of the orphanage. He has a rented apartment and enough money to pay the rent and put food on the table for the next three, four if he is frugal, months. By chance, he sees an offer on a well-to-do antique shop. And...

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[Deleted member 57675]

@doravg @WelcomeToSH. Story link?

 

[Deleted member 68927]

@doravg @WelcomeToSH. Story link?

It is in my signature, under that spoiler thing. The last story.

 

[Deleted member 57675]

It is in my signature, under that spoiler thing. The last story.

I guess I cannot see your signature here.

 

[RepresentingWrath]

It is in my signature, under that spoiler thing. The last story.

If you are browsing forums on a phone, you can't see the signature, so put a link to your story in the first message.

 

[Deleted member 68927]

If you are browsing forums on a phone, you can't see the signature, so put a link to your story in the first message.

I didn't know that. I put the signature

I guess I cannot see your signature here.

I placed the link. I didn't know that people on a phone couldn't see the signature.