Synopsis Review, Please

[lyharbour]

I'm working on a new synopsis for my story. Feedback would be greatly appreciated :) Thank you!
Here is the link to my story with the current synopsis: https://www.scribblehub.com/series/346801/unfortunately-im-an-evil-villainess/
Here is the new one:

I was Lady Valentina Avington, the beautiful, wicked, and narcissistic villainess of a novel. When I recalled memories of my past life, I decided I wanted everything the heroine had.

Using my knowledge of the future, I became a fake saint, the successor to my house, the future queen, and won over the male leads. When the novel began, all I had to do was dispose of the female lead.

“You’re not who I thought you were.”

“I despise you, Sister.”

“It’s revolting to even look at you.”

Yet nothing was as it seemed, and I didn’t know how much longer I could keep up my perfect facade. But call it ambition or greed, I would get what I wanted, by any means necessary. No matter the cost, I would win.

No need to like me, I have no excuses. You’ll be cheering for my downfall, just like the rest of them.

 

[IDKWtWrite-San]

I think your new sypnosis is actually great.

 

[RepresentingCaution]

The old synopsis includes a question, and I always recommend including a question or three to entice the reader. You can look at mine as examples, and please be sure to leave me a one-star rating ?

 

[PeacefulMyst]

The old synopsis includes a question, and I always recommend including a question or three to entice the reader. You can look at mine as examples, and please be sure to leave me a one-star rating ?

Done

“You’re not who I thought you were.”

“I despise you, Sister.”

“It’s revolting to even look at you.”

I like this. Several possible scenarios are running through my mind. Might entice readers.


Though that being said, It was a bit confusing to read and I had to reread it a couple times.

I was Lady Valentina Avington, the beautiful, wicked, and narcissistic villainess of a novel.

Because I didn't pay much attention to this line and just ready it as "Lady Valentina Avington, the beautiful, wicked, and narcissistic villainess of a novel I had read" But this is probably just me being dumb

 

[lyharbour]

I think your new sypnosis is actually great.

Thank you so much!

The old synopsis includes a question, and I always recommend including a question or three to entice the reader. You can look at mine as examples, and please be sure to leave me a one-star rating ?

Thanks for the tip!

Though that being said, It was a bit confusing to read and I had to reread it a couple times.

I'll try to make it better. Thanks for the feedback!