The Last to Comment Wins

[RepresentingCaution]

i love sleep deprivation

I can't stand it. I spend 12 hours in bed every night since I have to wake up several times to hold my nipple in my baby's mouth.

 

[BenJepheneT]

how im tryna look in my 50s

 

[HURGMCGURG]

Just give up.

 

[BenJepheneT]

Just give up.

that's what they told hitler when he said "i want to change the world"

 

[HURGMCGURG]

that's what they told hitler when he said "i want to change the world"

Who told him that?

 

[BenJepheneT]

Who told him that?

No one

I made it up

 

[BenJepheneT]

this guy just shows up and vibes, no question asked

god bless vietnam

 

[RepresentingCaution]

how im tryna look in my 50s

I know someone in his 50s who looks better.

 

[BenJepheneT]

I know someone in his 50s who looks better.

?

 

[RepresentingCaution]

?

 

[BenJepheneT]

ayyyy i made my first chapter for a smut series I'm working on

The Problem Store Alpha 0.1 [first night]

Synopsis: Guy is, well, a guy. He lives in a World, and has many stories to tell about it. The World has many different kinds of women, and Guy has stories with them too. You may or may not enjoy Guy’s stories, but if you feel like it, Guy himself will be more than happy to tell you about them. I...

docs.google.com

feel free to take a look

it's a tad bit long though

 

[RepresentingCaution]

ayyyy i made my first chapter for a smut series I'm working on

The Problem Store Alpha 0.1 [first night]

Synopsis: Guy is, well, a guy. He lives in a World, and has many stories to tell about it. The World has many different kinds of women, and Guy has stories with them too. You may or may not enjoy Guy’s stories, but if you feel like it, Guy himself will be more than happy to tell you about them. I...

docs.google.com

feel free to take a look

it's a tad bit long though

I don't have time to get through the whole thing, but I took a glance. I liked the colorful metaphors, but I didn't see any personality in either of the characters, so I lost interest pretty quickly.

 

[BenJepheneT]

I don't have time to get through the whole thing, but I took a glance. I liked the colorful metaphors, but I didn't see any personality in either of the characters, so I lost interest pretty quickly.

I don't have time to get through the whole thing

That's why.

I'm more of an investment kind of writer than the kind that hooks on first read

If you stick around for the whole thing, I'll make sure it's worth it for you

 

[gogo7966]

i love coffee

 

[HURGMCGURG]

I do not.

 

[RepresentingCaution]

That's why.

I'm more of an investment kind of writer than the kind that hooks on first read

If you stick around for the whole thing, I'll make sure it's worth it for you

I'm editing a 300-page manuscript, and I struggle to get through one page a day while Husband is watching Baby and playing Sesame Street in the background. If you want an example of a good hook, I recommend this book:

Dysmorphic Kingdom: a fairy tale: Chen, Colleen: 9781940233239: Amazon.com: Books

Dysmorphic Kingdom: a fairy tale [Chen, Colleen] on Amazon.com. *FREE* shipping on qualifying offers. Dysmorphic Kingdom: a fairy tale

www.amazon.com

 

[gogo7966]

i have too much insight and am suffering from frenzy

 

[RepresentingCaution]

i have too much insight and am suffering from frenzy

Write it down. That's how I dump things from my mind.

 

[gogo7966]

 

[HURGMCGURG]

RUN