My most recent attempt at Isekai/LitRPG... Thoughts?

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Right. Despite being on this site for a little over a year now, I'm still unknown.
I really don't like this, so I'm fishing for reviews/feedback, specifically on what needs to improve.
I know I have a promising career ahead of me, I'm just not sure what I'm missing.

Anyway, the title is "Chronicles of a New World."

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Any opinions/feedback/advice is welcome, even negative. Light me up.
 

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No harem/Gl/GB/smut and no sexual content tag. Without reading the story, I can tell you, it's unlikely for it to blow up.
 

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No harem/Gl/GB/smut and no sexual content tag. Without reading the story, I can tell you, it's unlikely for it to blow up.
A very sad fact that I'm used to dealing with by now. Authors with the writing skill of a 12 year old get 5x the readers I do with 3 chapters of porn...
 

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No harem/Gl/GB/smut and no sexual content tag. Without reading the story, I can tell you, it's unlikely for it to blow up.
It has an Iseka genre though. Those tend to do well. Though you are right. It won't be easy to hit the trends if you don't write what people want. But that should be avoided too! Imo.
Any opinions/feedback/advice is welcome, even negative. Light me up.
All I can say is try to add more tags. So people know what to expect from your story. You can have 25? I think... and you only have 12.
A very sad fact that I'm used to dealing with by now. Authors with the writing skill of a 12 year old get 5x the readers I do with 3 chapters of porn...
Sex sells, sadly. But even with all those readers and stuff. People only stick to the story, eventually. The sex dulls out after a while. Especially if it is pure porn.
 

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A very sad fact that I'm used to dealing with by now. Authors with the writing skill of a 12 year old get 5x the readers I do with 3 chapters of porn...
Hey, all you need is just that one spicy chapter to add in the smut tag/sexual content warning and bam. If you got 1-2 readers per chapter release before, you suddenly get double or triple that.
 

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A very sad fact that I'm used to dealing with by now. Authors with the writing skill of a 12 year old get 5x the readers I do with 3 chapters of porn...
Very true. But I'm not complaining

(It should be noted here that I am no "fellow victim", but one of the people profiting from the popularity of low quality porn)
 
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Honestly, smut gets readers a lot faster, but you'll get readers with nearly everything that has at least some appealing tags/genres. It'll only take longer. I have no harem/gl/gb/smut or sexual content in the tags and ~660 readers in 75k words. Could have been more if not for muliple times of hiatus (before that I was trending multiple times without doing anything special) or if I could actually write better...

Just looking roughly over it there are around 700 smut stories with a word count of 75k or below. From those, 30 or so are clearly better and a handful is doing just as my story. My story, without any of those tags, and sadly probably more weeks in hiatus than being written. Would I just take those weeks and add the small growth I get with each chapter, the number of smut stories above mine would probably be 15-20. Which is probably true for most genre tags here.


It is true, that there are some stories with these genres that appear in the trending list all the time. Which in turn gives the impression that tags are a must have. But the truth is also, that the majority of stories with these tags don't blow up. 50k smut stories with <100 readers aren't that rare either.

There are a lot of authors writing gl/harem/smut and the like and in those big group of people there are those, who are successful. But constant good work will easily catch up to the "normal" early push a lot of the stories get. And in turn it would also be a bit unfair to say, that some of those really big stories are only there for their tags...


So just keep at it, try to experiment with things (maybe a make-over for your synopsis or first chapter (some readers dislike the boring "he woke up" beginning) or even a "I dropped stories before" author's note) and there might be a time you hit gold with a story...
 

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I would probably start with a synopsis/cover.

The cover is obvious as you can imagine - your current visibility would be usually in "recently updated" pages and there the cover is much smaller than on your page - it would look even more obscure than it is right now.

Synopsis - you have a decently written synopsis. Unfortunately, all these 3 paragraphs tell me is that your story is "isekai" "male protagonist" and from the sounds of it "author self insert" Neither of which are bad by themselves but they don't really tell me a lot past what the tags already telling me.

And that is a big issue for you I believe. Isekai trends. There is a lot of isekai stories out on SH. But if you come over with the synopsis that says "I have isekai story" It would most likely be overlooked. You need to show potential readers why "you are not like the other girls" This is why you see all these silly "Isekai as a frying pan" they are trying to stand out from the general crowd.

On another point, your synopsis feels like you are writing a serious story rather than a slive of life. Which is also fine by itself but it clashes with 6 chapters/week update schedule. There are a lot of potential readers that are likely to skip a serious story that updates that quickly. I had a similar issue in the past myself - when I started posting on SH I had a lot of chapters saved up and I was posting daily. But I got none of that attention despite trending tags until I slowed down my schedule. That was also confirmed by some readers that told me they skipped my story previously simply because they felt that it was updating too quickly to be the "quality" rather than "quantity" type of story
 

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That was also confirmed by some readers that told me they skipped my story previously simply because they felt that it was updating too quickly to be the "quality" rather than "quantity" type of story
I find that so weird. So it is better to update slowly? Like... What if the author already has the book finished and is just posting it? Hm... this gives me something to think about.~
 

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Another point I would add to the great list by Snusmumriken is my personal thoughts on your synopsis:

I wouldn't pick up your book for a very simple reason: it mentions this Ahya over and over again and points towards other books. A shared universe is fine, but it can also give the impression that a reader will miss out on things, if they don't read the other stuff. Which is a pretty high entry barrier...

It's less important with more comedic or "throw-away" stories (e.g. the usual smut comedy), but it can be a turn-off for series that are more serious, because worldbuilding can be that much more important...
 

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Hey, all you need is just that one spicy chapter to add in the smut tag/sexual content warning and bam. If you got 1-2 readers per chapter release before, you suddenly get double or triple that.
Right now I have the 1-2 per chapter release, and I do like it.
Honestly, smut gets readers a lot faster, but you'll get readers with nearly everything that has at least some appealing tags/genres. It'll only take longer. I have no harem/gl/gb/smut or sexual content in the tags and ~660 readers in 75k words. Could have been more if not for muliple times of hiatus (before that I was trending multiple times without doing anything special) or if I could actually write better...

Just looking roughly over it there are around 700 smut stories with a word count of 75k or below. From those, 30 or so are clearly better and a handful is doing just as my story. My story, without any of those tags, and sadly probably more weeks in hiatus than being written. Would I just take those weeks and add the small growth I get with each chapter, the number of smut stories above mine would probably be 15-20. Which is probably true for most genre tags here.


It is true, that there are some stories with these genres that appear in the trending list all the time. Which in turn gives the impression that tags are a must have. But the truth is also, that the majority of stories with these tags don't blow up. 50k smut stories with <100 readers aren't that rare either.

There are a lot of authors writing gl/harem/smut and the like and in those big group of people there are those, who are successful. But constant good work will easily catch up to the "normal" early push a lot of the stories get. And in turn it would also be a bit unfair to say, that some of those really big stories are only there for their tags...


So just keep at it, try to experiment with things (maybe a make-over for your synopsis or first chapter (some readers dislike the boring "he woke up" beginning) or even a "I dropped stories before" author's note) and there might be a time you hit gold with a story...

This current story is an interesting side-project of mine. Most of my readers come from my first two novels, so they're more interested in my world-building.

Good tip about the first chapter though. That thought never crossed my mind. I have no problem retaining the readers that do stay, but new readers is a problem.
Synopsis - you have a decently written synopsis. Unfortunately, all these 3 paragraphs tell me is that your story is "isekai" "male protagonist" and from the sounds of it "author self insert" Neither of which are bad by themselves but they don't really tell me a lot past what the tags already telling me.

Thanks :) Though I'm not sure why people assume self-insert with a situation like that. Sure, the guy is from the city I spent most of my life in. But he's got very little in common with me. I chose that city just for it's familiarity. I'd make a horrible main character haha.

I write 2000 words (minimum) a day. This serves two purposes. First, I have an addiction to writing. If I'm not writing, I don't know what to do with my time. Second, I want my story to appear on the front page of ScribbleHub as often as possible. I've seen stories in a similar vein do well, so I think the main problem is the content of my stories, rather than the rate of production. But I'll put it to my readers, to try to get a sense.
I find that so weird. So it is better to update slowly? Like... What if the author already has the book finished and is just posting it? Hm... this gives me something to think about.~

I'm not sure I agree with this point of view. I feel like I started performing much better when I went to a regular upload schedule, once a day. Plus, it's a nice even number to work with, 5/week.

Indeed it does warrant some thinking about. But if I'm gonna have to reduce the amount of chapters uploaded per week, then I'm going to have to work on more than one story at a time. I can't do just 4k or 6k words a week. I'll go mad :(
 
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So, I read the first 3 or 4 chapters, and I can tell you this - I would not continue. The introduction is almost word to word with every other generic isekai: wake up in a first, pick up a sword, and fight a bandit/monster. But that's not the problem. I usually search for isekai with sexual content not for the sex but to avoid stories like this. I'll explain why.

Right after the fight, the MC lies down and is approached by a woman. The woman, who is supposedly aware that the area is infested with bandits, approaches a lone man, and besides this being one of the most common tropes for bandit traps, she somehow doesn't notice the sword literally on top of him. Now, this already raised a few flags for me but I continued. The woman graciously informs the MC of the danger that lurks around, and after she's spooked by the completely unhidden sword, she comes to trust the MC because he blushed and mumbled. She even goes out of her way to offer him a ride.

This is the usual recipe for the cookie-cutter shonen type MC which coincidentally I deeply despise. All of this is based on first impressions, so I might very well be wrong but that was my very short experience with the story. Otherwise, the grammar and structure seemed fine.
 

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I'm not sure I agree with this point of view. I feel like I started performing much better when I went to a regular upload schedule, once a day. Plus, it's a nice even number to work with, 5/week.

Indeed it does warrant some thinking about. But if I'm gonna have to reduce the amount of chapters uploaded per week, then I'm going to have to work on more than one story at a time. I can't do just 4k or 6k words a week. I'll go mad :(
Hm... I would have thought more updates= more readers. So that is why I was confused. Then again, I also understand what the other fellow said. Yet confuses me at the same time.:blob_melt:

I do usually 5-10k words a week. But my chapters are long. *Then again, I don't post unless I finish the entire story.* I feel like I would go mad too. It is my escape so I write for the fun of it. :blob_happy:
 

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Thanks :) Though I'm not sure why people assume self-insert with a situation like that. Sure, the guy is from the city I spent most of my life in. But he's got very little in common with me. I chose that city just for it's familiarity. I'd make a horrible main character haha.

I write 2000 words (minimum) a day. This serves two purposes. First, I have an addiction to writing. If I'm not writing, I don't know what to do with my time. Second, I want my story to appear on the front page of ScribbleHub as often as possible. I've seen stories in a similar vein do well, so I think the main problem is the content of my stories, rather than the rate of production. But I'll put it to my readers, to try to get a sense.
Note I have no idea who you are and how far away you are from the MC. But having said that - a very specific locality and most importantly a "writer MC" point toward self insert. I just started reading the synopsis and I already have at least two commonalities between MC and author - it is very easy to assume that is the case.

I write about 1000-3000 per day. then I trim and edit - which results in 3000-5000 chapter in one week. Can I post more/faster? - absolutely but not as a complex plot story. This style works well with lighthearted and easy on the plot slice of life stories. Which again are absolutely fine and which are quite popular on SH and as web novels in general.

In your case, you have a clash of styles. The synopsis is telling me that you are trying to write a serious book. but you are posting as fast as it was a web novel. And judging by 1st chapter and the other comments it feels like a web novel too. So the readers you enticed with your synopsis will be more likely to be turned off by the actual story. While readers who are likely to read that type of story are more likely to be turned off by serious synopsis.
Hm... I would have thought more updates= more readers. So that is why I was confused. Then again, I also understand what the other fellow said. Yet confuses me at the same time.:blob_melt:

I do usually 5-10k words a week. But my chapters are long. *Then again, I don't post unless I finish the entire story.* I feel like I would go mad too. It is my escape so I write for the fun of it. :blob_happy:
It depends on the story as I've mentioned above. A light slice of life with easily digestible and short chapters - daily chapters are pretty much a must. A heavy plot book that wants to show the author is taking things seriously - daily chapters would be detrimental in my opinion. both as an author, editor and reader.
 

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Hm... I would have thought more updates= more readers. So that is why I was confused. Then again, I also understand what the other fellow said. Yet confuses me at the same time.:blob_melt:

I do usually 5-10k words a week. But my chapters are long. *Then again, I don't post unless I finish the entire story.* I feel like I would go mad too. It is my escape so I write for the fun of it. :blob_happy:
One thing I have noticed is that you will not hit trending ( right after posting a chapter ) until a full day had passed. Does that mean it only registers the views of every other day? I honestly have no idea, haven't posted that consistently to know. But with that said, most of my daily new views come from recommendations, so I don't know.
 

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One thing I have noticed is that you will not hit trending ( right after posting a chapter ) until a full day had passed. Does that mean it only registers the views of every other day? I honestly have no idea, haven't posted that consistently to know. But with that said, most of my daily new views come from recommendations, so I don't know.
Apparently, I have been in trending a few times according to others, and I had no idea. So I have 0 clues about how it works. I only found out yesterday when I saw it at # 9 lol. I don't think anyone knows how it works. And I guess that is a good thing. :blob_melt:
 

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I have never once been on Trending, I can be sure of that.
 

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On another point, your synopsis feels like you are writing a serious story rather than a slive of life. Which is also fine by itself but it clashes with 6 chapters/week update schedule. There are a lot of potential readers that are likely to skip a serious story that updates that quickly. I had a similar issue in the past myself - when I started posting on SH I had a lot of chapters saved up and I was posting daily. But I got none of that attention despite trending tags until I slowed down my schedule. That was also confirmed by some readers that told me they skipped my story previously simply because they felt that it was updating too quickly to be the "quality" rather than "quantity" type of story

Meanwhile, I'm actually writing 1-2 chapters every day, not even posting saved-up stuff.
I'm a machine! But that's because I don't want to end like Miura, if you know what I mean.
 

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Pretty basic premise, very on-brand for this cycle. I can't provide much feedback beyond that from just the premise though. I'll leave a few comments on the chapters as I plunge into Ahya.

I do enjoy more socially reserved MC's though. All the self-rightous star children waving big vieny... world views across the narrative like a walking stick is wearing me out.
 

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I took a look at the cover and synopsis. The cover isn't very interesting so it doesn't draw me in. However I think the synopsis might be where you're losing people. All I know about the story is that a man gets teleported to another world. That's it. The standard definition of an isekai. There's nothing telling me why your story is special. There's no hook or mystery involved. Maybe if we know what his 'purpose' was, it would be more enticing to read. We don't know anything about the world or the main character and what makes him special. Even if he's an average guy, he still needs at least one special thing to draw the reader in.
 
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