I need feedback for this synopsis of a smut novel that I'll be working on

[Ellieporter]

Alternate title: A Newbie Wife's Journey to Pleasing Her Husband!

Synopsis: Story follows around the life of Watanabe Kyoko, an earnest hardworking office lady who is somewhat a virgin and is married to Murata Azai, a high level executive and a closet pervert who frequently browses a certain board forum on the internet

 

[witch_sorrowful]

I would like to know more of what the story might contain. I mean, here of course I have think it is going towards netorase, I think? If you clarify with some more subtle hints, that would be great. Or just have a battery of tags are the end of the synopsis.

 

[Deleted member 49654]

I would like to know more of what the story might contain. I mean, here of course I have think it is going towards netorase, I think? If you clarify with some more subtle hints, that would be great. Or just have a battery of tags are the end of the synopsis.

Eh, why? I don't see any cheating mentioned in the synopsis. She seems to be the innocent type while he is actually a pervert. Therefore, she gotta learn on her own (by reading books, browsing porn sites, reading fanfics, etc), and clumsily try to satisfy him. Seems like a smutty journey of a newlywed couple.
At least this is how I imagine this story is going to unfold. Based on the title and synopsis.

 

[Ellieporter]

I would like to know more of what the story might contain. I mean, here of course I have think it is going towards netorase, I think? If you clarify with some more subtle hints, that would be great. Or just have a battery of tags are the end of the synopsis.

There is no cuckolding in the story lol. I plan to introduce Kyoko as a shy woman who literally has zero experience in Sex but has performed holding hands and kissing with her former boyfriends and her husband. That's it, but now that she married Azai, the executive from another company who has experience in Sex gained in watching porn and reading smut in his free time. She decides that in order for her to please and satisfy her husband's sexual desires as she usually sees him watching porn everytime she arrives back home from work. She will do anything to relieve his "stress"

Eh, why? I don't see any cheating mentioned in the synopsis. She seems to be the innocent type while he is actually a pervert. Therefore, she gotta learn on her own (by reading books, browsing porn sites, reading fanfics, etc), and clumsily try to satisfy him. Seems like a smutty journey of a newlywed couple.
At least this is how I imagine this story is going to unfold. Based on the title and synopsis.

Yup, they are a newly wed couple.

 

[Deleted member 49654]

There is no cuckolding in the story lol. I plan to introduce Kyoko as a shy woman who literally has zero experience in Sex but has performed holding hands and kissing on her former boyfriends. That's it, but now that she married Azai, the executive from another company who has experience in Sex gained in watching porn and reading smut in his free time. She decides that in order for her to please and satisfy her husband's sexual desires as she usually sees him watching porn everytime she arrives back home from work. She will do anything to relieve his "stress"

Yup, they are a newly wed couple.

Seems like a fine story. Well, it all depends on the execution.
I want to ask one question. What do you mean by:

holding hands and kissing her former boyfriends.

She hasn't done this with her husband? Was it an arranged marriage?

 

[Ellieporter]

Seems like a fine story. Well, it all depends on the execution.
I want to ask one question. What do you mean by:

She hasn't done this with her husband? Was it arranged marriage?

Good question, they have kissed and held hands but that's the only thing they have done, so far. I should have included and her husband on the post. I just woke up when I typed that lol.

I've edited the post to add it. Thanks for pointing it though.

 

[Deleted member 49654]

Good question, they have kissed and held hands but that's the only thing they have done, so far. I should have included and her husband on the post. I just woke up when I typed that lol.

So, actually, both are noobs, but one is a noob with expectations. It seems like it can have a comedy as a tag as well.

 

[witch_sorrowful]

Eh, why? I don't see any cheating mentioned in the synopsis. She seems to be the innocent type while he is actually a pervert. Therefore, she gotta learn on her own (by reading books, browsing porn sites, reading fanfics, etc), and clumsily try to satisfy him. Seems like a smutty journey of a newlywed couple.
At least this is how I imagine this story is going to unfold. Based on the title and synopsis.

I equated it with pervert and things. See, that's what I mean - clarification will be so much better. Tags work best here.