MissRiWrites
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hey guys, so i’m a new writer here and i think i’m losing my mind over my pacing.
i'm writing a slower-burn psychological mystery (Before the Storm Gathers – Prana) but my views/retention have been tanking recently and it's making me super paranoid that the intro is just a total slog to get through. because it’s mostly mind games and setup rather than immediate fast action, i'm terrified people are clicking away early on because it feels too slow or info-heavy upfront.
if anyone has a bit of time and likes dark thrillers, could you check out the first couple chapters and give it to me straight? is the hook actually decent or am i just boring people to tears with worldbuilding?
really need some brutal honesty on why the momentum is dying. thank you!! Chapter-1 Humans mistook the silence of the oncoming storm for the stillness of safety.
i'm writing a slower-burn psychological mystery (Before the Storm Gathers – Prana) but my views/retention have been tanking recently and it's making me super paranoid that the intro is just a total slog to get through. because it’s mostly mind games and setup rather than immediate fast action, i'm terrified people are clicking away early on because it feels too slow or info-heavy upfront.
if anyone has a bit of time and likes dark thrillers, could you check out the first couple chapters and give it to me straight? is the hook actually decent or am i just boring people to tears with worldbuilding?
really need some brutal honesty on why the momentum is dying. thank you!! Chapter-1 Humans mistook the silence of the oncoming storm for the stillness of safety.