The small red number addiction....I get it.
I'd be happy to read your story, and comment a plenty. For me comments and feedback are more then welcome, a rating would make me very happy, for a review it might be a bit early into to story.
Ninetails
I don't know if it is helpful, not that experienced, but occasionally you have a sentence in-between where you switch from third party narrator to first party narrator.
Something akin to "their house raises from the ashes" to "our house raises from the Ashes" which breaks the otherwise comfy...
If this threat isn't dead. I would also be happy with a feedback, curious if my story has any potential to sell, if you have the time. I do write mostly for fun so please... don't entirely destroy it....
Ninetails
I haven't actually posted much into the Forums, but never encountered this so I wanted to ask what it is about.
Not entirely sure this is supposed to be asked in here either