Requesting feedback on my web novel: Love Beyond Walls

[RinWintour]

Hello fellow Authors & Readers!


This is Rin Wintour. I recently started my writing journey this year with my BL web novel, Love Beyond Walls. I would like to request some feedback on my novel, especially regarding the writing style and story development.

I believe my writing has improved compared to the earlier chapters, but I would still appreciate a third-party review and honest opinions. I would be very grateful for any feedback, criticism, or tips that could help me improve further.

I recently received a review on another website where I publish the same novel, and one of the points mentioned was that my synopsis felt too plain, so I have revised it as well.

The novel currently has 18 chapters. I would greatly appreciate any help you can offer—you are welcome to read as little or as much as you like.

Thank you!

 

[Bimbanana]

I cannot see it, there's a wall blocking it

and no link also

 

[Lysander_Works]

Once again, a book that uses passive action, so I passively passed on it. Still a pacifist though, so that's all I got on info.

Oh, and there's the link:
https://www.scribblehub.com/read/2091735-love-beyond-walls/chapter/2091742/

 

[MissRiWrites]

I cannot see it, there's a wall blocking it

and no link also

Hey! I know this is off the topic but how do you paste link of your books so it looks like this with cover picture?

 

[Bimbanana]

Hey! I know this is off the topic but how do you paste link of your books so it looks like this with cover picture?

Hmm?
If you mean like the one i had, it called a signature.
You can click on your own username on the right top (if you use pc)
And there'll be signature in one of the option

 

[MissRiWrites]

Hmm?
If you mean like the one i had, it called a signature.
You can click on your own username on the right top (if you use pc)
And there'll be signature in one of the option

ummm..okay

 

[Bimbanana]

ummm..okay

Its quite confusing, I admit,
But you can peek at the tutorial made by a certain black jerk cat on this link.

https://www.scribblehubforum.com/threads/we-all-live-in-a-village-together.27962/page-8

She guides me to make my current signature. Just see our convo there and please dont tell her that I'm actually grateful

 

[Alski]

She guides me to make my current signature. Just see our convo there and please dont tell her that I'm actually grateful

I came here because someone told me you were trying to convince people i was female again.

 

[FRWriter]

Its quite confusing, I admit,
But you can peek at the tutorial made by a certain black jerk cat on this link.

https://www.scribblehubforum.com/threads/we-all-live-in-a-village-together.27962/page-8

She guides me to make my current signature. Just see our convo there and please dont tell her that I'm actually grateful

I like cheating. Can you share your full signature? I think your's among the cleanest I've seen here.

If you do, I'll remove my 1-star ratings from your stories and upgrade them to a full two-star.*







*This is a joke

 

[Bimbanana]

I like cheating. Can you share your full signature? I think your's among the cleanest I've seen here.

If you do, I'll remove my 1-star ratings from your stories and upgrade them to a full two-star.*







*This is a joke

For clarification, this is from Alski. She's the one who teach me this.

1. On signature, click the 3 vertical dots on the most right
2. Choose insert table
3. make the grid 2x2
4. Insert pic link and url link accordingly on each grid.
5. Attach the url link on the pic also.
6.fix the layout (make it all centered)

that's all

 

[MissRiWrites]

I came here because someone told me you were trying to convince people i was female again.

Wait you are.....not?

Its quite confusing, I admit,
But you can peek at the tutorial made by a certain black jerk cat on this link.

https://www.scribblehubforum.com/threads/we-all-live-in-a-village-together.27962/page-8

She guides me to make my current signature. Just see our convo there and please dont tell her that I'm actually grateful

THANKS BIMBANANA! I DID IT!

 

[Alski]

3. make the grid 2x2

It doesnt just have to be 2x2 you could make it 2x5 or 1x10 ect if you had more stories, the box grid will try to fit the formatting of what ever screen you are viewing the forum on.