Yet another fool asking for reviews :D

Aphel

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Hey every one, I have recently rewritten my story, and I would honestly appreciate it if you could tell me your thoughts, much appreciated
and the shortest introduction I can think of is

Everyone thinks she’s just a child.
But her She eyes see it—the flicker in her stare.
The part of her that remembers how it all ended.

She doesn’t laugh. She doesn’t cry.
She just stares back.

Meanwhile, in Ar’cen’s head:
“Why is she staring at me again? oh no... Forgot to wash the dishes didn't I?”
Story name : Ar'cen
 
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