Wrote reboot, how does it stand compared to the original and anything I can improve on?

Spoopytagedie

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A few years back i wrote here but had to stop for certain reasons. I regretted it so Im doing it again. So far its well recieved but im not really all that satisfied and want to see where I can improve. If anyone is willing could they please take a look and tell me what could use work.

Id also appriciate it if anyone read the original and told me how the reboot compares so far. Heres the links for both. Ive already abandoned the original so any writing advice would be purely for the reboot.

Thank you in advance. Ill take advice in any form.

Heres the original.


And heres the reboot.

 
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