Would love some feedback on my new story

[danielnewwyn]

Hey! I just uploaded a new story recently. Anyone wants to have a quick look at the first 2 chapters and tell me if you'd keep reading? Thanks!

Here's the link to my story: Maximum Intimidation Knight In a World Full of Mages

 

[Deleted member 266]

tell me if you'd keep reading?

Its ok. Not for me.

Good luck.

Oh and Chapter 1

If I die here, I won’t survive!

Typo? or joke?

 

[Deleted member 222160]

i'm a simple person. i see humor, i dig in. and your first chapter was a blast ? i'm not really into the genre tbh, but the MC's internal monologues kept me going. nice one.

 

[danielnewwyn]

Its ok. Not for me.

Good luck.

Oh and Chapter 1

Typo? or joke?

Supposed to be a joke, lol