Wondering how I'm doing with this (any and all feedback/criticism welcome)

[Mono_Artist]

I'd say I'm still pretty new to writing, which is part of the reason I decided to write this, and so I'm wondering how I'm doing so far. Any and all feedback is welcome.

The Witch and the Other-Worlder: A Tale of the Forgotten Lands

'It was like a blur to her. Stuck in a void, a stop sign, traces of red, and a door. Lona woke up, in a serene field, without any recollection of how she got there. In fact, she remembers nothing before waking up. She soon learns she's in a world...

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[Temple]

Hmmm, for a start I think can study how dialogue tag works. You're only three chapters in, so I think it's a pretty good investment to take the time to study it and then edit your chapters.