Needs more description. The story per chapter feels unfinished, and jumps around like an old animated series expecting you to follow along, but can't seem to explain anything of importance.
The pages are too short, and rushed. The chapter titles are bland, (not that mine are any better). but there's nothing that reels you in. No cover. the synopses describes something almost scifi or fantasy, but I got none of that from the actual writing.
Everything seemed more like footnotes of how you wanted to tell the story, and what you imagined the dialogue would be like, and only posted that. It needs more depth to the writing, and an introduction to the characters.
It seems like bulletpoints, or scenes being recorded; where a story needs to flow naturally, one thing leading to the next, and continuing forward.
You also dropped it all in less than a week. The spikes on your graph are people giving it the chance to be seen, and read. They either read it all in the same hour from being so short, or dropped it due to the way it was presented. after than either they're waiting for more, or won't touch it. you have a third bump in the graph telling you there were others looking into it, but didn't stick.
I'd recommend writing more detail into your story, connecting the points you already have. connect the dialogue to actions. Give the story more substance, and aim for 1000 words per chapter. re-read it as a reader, not as the author, to see if it makes sense. Read it as if you've never seen it before in your life. Add words where you think they're needed, remove words where you think they're boring, or not needed. If you can't do that, ask someone else to read it for you, and give you their feedback. Whatever they say, don't take it personally, take it as trying to help. If they say it sucks, ask why, if they say it sucks because it sucks, then they're just being rude af, and you don't truly need someone like them in your life, but that's a whole other can of worms.
