Using perspective change as a crutch

[NotaNuffian]

To me it is too late. Seven chapters in too late.

So I stubbornly stuck to having my MC as a child and it is bad.

Because I have locked myself to the character that does not have much say without looking completely out of place.

Making him a child prodigy is also out of the story because of the world he is in.

And to cut away from the boring bits, I often cut to other people when I think that MC is being boring again.

Which is a lot.

Maybe I should not be comparing with the CNs I read and KR Trait Hoarder, because their MCs might be boring but it is still more autonomous than my MC due to being older.

But right now as I reread my stuff, out of the first eight chapters I wrote, more than two chapters worth of screentime belongs to other people.

 

[beast_regards]

We had this kind of thread before.

This is why the reincarnation-as-the-child stories usually skip the childhood, reducing it either to the one panel of manga, or the quick montage slideshows.

Only exceptions in this are stories where the protagonist starts to have agency and thus influence the plot as improbably young age. All of them are prodigies, recognized as such from the very young age. Last example of the protagonist changed their mind in a day, or something. One panel he wonders that they couldn't reveal the knowledge that couldn't match the 5-year-old child, but it literally takes one stroll through the palace grounds to realize that being the son of the absolutist monarch, no one could question what he says, anyway.

 

[RepresentingPride]

To me it is too late. Seven chapters in too late.

So I stubbornly stuck to having my MC as a child and it is bad.

Because I have locked myself to the character that does not have much say without looking completely out of place.

Making him a child prodigy is also out of the story because of the world he is in.

And to cut away from the boring bits, I often cut to other people when I think that MC is being boring again.

Which is a lot.

Maybe I should not be comparing with the CNs I read and KR Trait Hoarder, because their MCs might be boring but it is still more autonomous than my MC due to being older.

But right now as I reread my stuff, out of the first eight chapters I wrote, more than two chapters worth of screentime belongs to other people.

Most skip the child time, if you want to write it, Mushoku Tensei and Suprem Magus did it pretty well from what I remember. It become the learning phase/ build up foundation for later arc.

 

[NotaNuffian]

We had this kind of thread before.

This is why the reincarnation-as-the-child stories usually skip the childhood, reducing it either to the one panel of manga, or the quick montage slideshows.

Only exceptions in this are stories where the protagonist starts to have agency and thus influence the plot as improbably young age. All of them are prodigies, recognized as such from the very young age. Last example of the protagonist changed their mind in a day, or something. One panel he wonders that they couldn't reveal the knowledge that couldn't match the 5-year-old child, but it literally takes one stroll through the palace grounds to realize that being the son of the absolutist monarch, no one could question what he says, anyway.

Most skip the child time, if you want to write it, Mushoku Tensei and Suprem Magus did it pretty well from what I remember. It become the learning phase/ build up foundation for later arc.

Yeah.

I wanted to showcase the hardship faced by MC and that even with his supposed cheat and past life knowledge, he still can't resolve many issues. Not without causing more at least.

Most CNs that I referred to had MC being at late teens or at least adulthood for capability.

That just translate into my work as "a young boy below ten who also is a serial killer."

And I also made the place he lives in as oppressive as possible...

Yeah I will try and get it done.

 

[beast_regards]

That just translate into my work as "a young boy below ten who also is a serial killer."

Saga of Tanya the Evil is about the psychopathic child soldier, so precedent is there, as long as there is a protagonist who actually does something

 

[CharlesEBrown]

Don't know the title of it but one of the audionovels my wife was listening to had one chapter that covered the character's first three years as a child (he was reincarnated twice before being born as a child, and had most of his memories aside from a few blocked trauma ones intact), another chapter that covered ages 4 to 13, and then at 14 he heads off to train and the main story really begins. And that was the last part I listened to.

 

[Valmond]

To me it is too late. Seven chapters in too late.

So I stubbornly stuck to having my MC as a child and it is bad.

Because I have locked myself to the character that does not have much say without looking completely out of place.

Making him a child prodigy is also out of the story because of the world he is in.

And to cut away from the boring bits, I often cut to other people when I think that MC is being boring again.

Which is a lot.

Maybe I should not be comparing with the CNs I read and KR Trait Hoarder, because their MCs might be boring but it is still more autonomous than my MC due to being older.

But right now as I reread my stuff, out of the first eight chapters I wrote, more than two chapters worth of screentime belongs to other people.

Seven chapters isn’t bad. You can dedicate the Arc to that. Though, some measures will have to be taken.

By the end of the Arc, try to establish a strong connectable goal.

Something that links well to the reader. Given how far you are in, I assume it isn’t at a natural point. So, around Chapter 12 would be good to break them out of that part.

Each chapter can give a bit that ultimately leads into their conclusion for that section of their life.

 

[PancakesWitch]

I just adjusted the world building to fit a young child being of angecy or important. Then again, the only cases where I've written this are in high fantasy heavy stories where one of them is the daughter of two heroes, and a half-elf, elves are known for being smart and brilliant from a very young age, starting to talk and interact at a year of age. the other is a boy born from simple farmers but everyone awakens a class and also a spirit when they're born, and shit has crazy magic so its not too crazy. sometimes there are genres that aren't fit for a child mc for the long run, maybe you could expand the world building to give a proper explanationon why the kid is important or can have agency in the story, or just skip it

 

[Aiyoki]

"nigotta hitomi no lilianne" has over 200 chapters and I think the MC is like 4 years old by the last chapter.

sadly I think the author lost their motivation for continuing the story :(

 

[Placeholder]

>> sadly I think the author lost their motivation for continuing the story :(

Nigotta Hitomi no Lilianne - Novel Updates

www.novelupdates.com

> In a nutshell, this is the adventures of the reincarnated, blind, maid raping toddler and her (his) toddlercon fairy girlfriend.

 

[Aiyoki]

> In a nutshell, this is the adventures of the reincarnated, blind, maid raping toddler and her (his) toddlercon fairy girlfriend.

Oh... well I never got that far into reading the story... It's unfortunate to hear that it took that kind of a sick turn...

 

[Valmond]

Oh... well I never got that far into reading the story... It's unfortunate to hear that it took that kind of a sick turn...

They say nothing good happens after midnight and late into the night at that. And what happens when I decide to check the forums when I should be sleeping?

This.

 

[Placeholder]

> Mushoku Tensei

Completely non problematic?

 

[DireBadger]

Ender's game.
'nuff said.