Uncensored Feedback [6/6]

[Cynthell]

UNCENSORED FEEDBACK VOLUME ONE?
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Hiya, I find myself in a jovial mood as of late. Finishing a considerable backlog of chapters and achieving life goals tends to do that. As such, I find myself with a bit of spare time this week to read for once, a rather unexpected development since I begun writing. So, come one come all authors of SH, be you a veteran looking for fresh insight or a newcomer with a freshly published story. I will read your story, up to the first three chapters and possibly more if I enjoy it, and review it. Now, let me be clear, I will not pull my punches. I am of the mindset constructive criticism, no matter how harsh, is vastly more beneficial than jauntless praise.

There are few rules for submission, the main being first come first serve. There is no genre I wont read and even if your story does fall into one I don't generally enjoy; I will still be objective in my critique.

Review Request Guidelines:
- Six slots available, first come first serve!
- Story must have at least 5 chapters OR 5k words, I need enough to go off to base a review.
- Grading will be on three aspects: Pacing, Grammar, and Enjoyment
- I will read smut, I am a smut author after all, but if all 5 chapters are smut I may veto it.
- Please note my opinions are my own and in no way are they to be taken as fact, I am simply giving my unbiased opinions. If you can't handle that please do not reply.

SUBMISSIONS [6/6]

= Godslayer Lysette by RiaCorvidiva LINK
= A Tamer's Adventure by LesserCodex LINK
= The Shadows within by KoyukiMegumi LINK
= Lowly Ascent by AdOtherwise LINK
= Son of the Sun by HellsPerfectSpawn LINK
= Hordedoom by rookieqw LINK



SUBMISSIONS CLOSED. BETTER LUCK NEXT TIME, IF I HAVE MORE TIME THIS WEEK I'LL PROBABLY DO IT AGAIN!

 

[RiaCorvidiva]

Welp, let's see how much of Godslayer Lysette you can stomach.

 

[LesserCodex]

Well, then a good thing I decided to check in here is my submissions go as hard and fair as you can.

A Tamer’s Adventure

Martyn, a young staunch panther-kin male, must find a way to power under his class as a monster tamer. Now fending for himself as an adventurer, he finds a chance when his failure rewards him, sparking a drive within him. To build a loving and strong monster girl, Harem! Note:...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[KoyukiMegumi]

The Shadows Within
or
The Gate of Shadows

Thank you for your time!

 

[PBJ_Time]

Thank you! It's still a draft, but I hope you enjoy it.

Beware the Horde

Synopsis Too raw to live, too far to die. Hajime expected the usual things upon being reborn into another world: dragons, magic, a skill system, or maybe even some “chosen hero” prophecy. Instead, he gets an open field and a million slimes surrounding him at every corner. Once the slimes ...

docs.google.com

 

[Cynthell]

Thank you! It's still a draft, but I hope you enjoy it.

Beware the Horde

Synopsis Too raw to live, too far to die. Hajime expected the usual things upon being reborn into another world: dragons, magic, a skill system, or maybe even some “chosen hero” prophecy. Instead, he gets an open field and a million slimes surrounding him at every corner. Once the slimes ...

docs.google.com

I should probably have added it must be a story posted on SH, sorry :c

 

[AdOtherwise]

UNCENSORED FEEDBACK VOLUME ONE?
______________________________________________________________________________________________​

Hiya, I find myself in a jovial mood as of late. Finishing a considerable backlog of chapters and achieving life goals tends to do that. As such, I find myself with a bit of spare time this week to read for once, a rather unexpected development since I begun writing. So, come one come all authors of SH, be you a veteran looking for fresh insight or a newcomer with a freshly published story. I will read your story, up to the first three chapters and possibly more if I enjoy it, and review it. Now, let me be clear, I will not pull my punches. I am of the mindset constructive criticism, no matter how harsh, is vastly more beneficial than jauntless praise.

There are few rules for submission, the main being first come first serve. There is no genre I wont read and even if your story does fall into one I don't generally enjoy; I will still be objective in my critique.

Review Request Guidelines:
- Six slots available, first come first serve!
- Story must have at least 5 chapters OR 5k words, I need enough to go off to base a review.
- Grading will be on three aspects: Pacing, Grammar, and Enjoyment
- I will read smut, I am a smut author after all, but if all 5 chapters are smut I may veto it.
- Please note my opinions are my own and in no way are they to be taken as fact, I am simply giving my unbiased opinions. If you can't handle that please do not reply.

SUBMISSIONS [3/6]

= Godslayer Lysette by RiaCorvidiva LINK
= A Tamer's Adventure by LesserCodex LINK
= The Shadows within by KoyukiMegumi LINK

Lowly Ascent

Within a desolate realm, where discarded worlds were stitched together, a rupture tore open, releasing a small child into the fragmented expanse. Above him, the sky revealed three eerie moons, while an ominous black mass loomed ominously in their wake. Disoriented and engulfed by a putrid...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[HellsPerfectSpawn]

Greetings, I request feedback for the following. Don't feel the need to restrain yourself.

Son of the Sun

Waking up in a ditch with no memory of who he is or how he got there, Solen embarks on a perilous journey to piece together his shattered past. As he navigates through old and new challenges, he discovers that some truths are best left forgotten. “For if you gaze...

www.scribblehub.com

PS: Much obliged

 

[Rookieqw]

Thank you for your kind offer! Here is my story: https://www.scribblehub.com/read/1042505-hordedoom/chapter/1050298/

 

[RiaCorvidiva]

For transparency's sake, my feedback was received a short time ago.