UGH! Another Story review request?

[BLIGHT_ZERO]

Yes you bet it is bitch, read it, give my strengths, give me my weaknesses, and give me what I need to work on.
Or we can throw dem hands

https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1187069/tyrant-villainess-omega-only-wants-me/

 

[Puji-Maki]

It's a Girls Love so No. I'm not comfortable reading this genre, sorry.

 

[BLIGHT_ZERO]

It's a Girls Love so No. I'm not comfortable reading this genre, sorry.

hatin ass

 

[sapphicdagger]

make the chapters longer ................................

 

[BLIGHT_ZERO]

make the chapters longer ................................View attachment 32946

over my dead body..............................

 

[Fariy]

Weakness:
description are a bit short. A bit more so I don’t forget new Characters would be good.
Geography does is this Sci-Fi Space Opera? A short introduction of either the MC or narrator could help to know where is what. For example is the colony a full planet or is nation
Setting Is it Futuristic or medieval? It comes across as strange mix of both.

Strengths:
Fast Pacing, I never jumped forward because nothing happens.
the MC inner drama is nice pace and doesn’t goes on and on.

I think your story has potential. Maybe edit some of the existing chapters for some description.

thanks for reading.