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I just finish chapters 28-30 of Beast Heroes Roxy's Rebirth, and I think I handled the Toxic relationship between Roxy and Stella pretty well, but I would like some advice and feedback in case I want to explore this kind of relationship!
Questions
1. what did you think?
2. What mistakes did I make?
3. how can I improve in the future
Chapter 29- Truth!
As we made our way to the Warehouse District, i decided that Alice needed to know the truth, she DESERVED to know.
"Alice, there is somthing i need to tell you, but i'm afraid you won't believe me." i said.
"Girl, we live in world where monsters come out of portals and people can transform into beasts, Try Me." Alice spoke.
And so, i explained everything, how i died in a previous life, but the powers of a Time Golem brought me back to the day me and Stella awakened.
Alice, took it wel....
"That egomanical bitch! what monster kills the person that did nothing but help them?" Alice spat.
"Stella was always one to put herself first..." i said.
Alice picked up on this, "Look Roxy, this was NOT your fault, how the fuck would you know that Stella was ploting to kill you, you ain't got ESP!"
"I thought if i broke up with Stella, things would get better, and they did, i met you, and you were the best choice i made ever since i was brought back."
We share a kiss, and continued foward until we found me and Stella's old hangout, Stella owned this particular warehouse, in my past life, i would bring Stella Golden Cores and Elemental cores to help her get stronger.
Once inside, we found Mom, tied to a support beam.
"Roxy! Alice!" cried Mom.
Before we could get to her, the warehouse door slammed shut, and out came Stella, with her were two other girls, mostl likely street thugs.
"Here we are Roxy, tell me, this place bring back memories?" Stella asked, "Any feelings?"
"Yes, disgust, anger, self-loathing, stop me when i get to somthing you like." i replied, "Why are you doing this?"
"Why? because you are MINE! i was the only girl that actually wanted to be near you!" Stella snapped.
"Bullshit!" Alice snapped back, "I can name 20 girls off the back of my hands that would love to be with Roxy, you just got to her first."
"I protected you, kept the creeps and scum away from you!" Stella replied.
"You PAID them to leave me alone.." I fired back, "And if i remember, all i was to you was a servant at best, a TOY at worst!"
"And what's wrong with that! to be my plaything was an honnor!" Stella explained.
"You really don't fucking get it, I wanted Love, not Slavery!" i roared, "i gave you my heart and all you did was crush it, smash it, and gave it back to me, expecting a thank you! now i finally found the right person to give my heart to, and you can't handle it?"
"Because you belong to me! do you know who i am? i'm Stella Wester! and i always get what i want!" she roared, hot tears streaming down her face.
And that's when it finally hit me, "You were given everything you ever wanted, or screamed for, nobody ever said "NO" to you, or rejected you, have they?"
Stella looked at me, her tears still flowing from her eyes, i approached her and spoke softly.
"I'm sorry Stella, really i am, but what we had wasn't healthy, I love Alice, we bring out the best in each other, but i'm sure you will find love one day..."
"SHUT UP!"
Me and Alice stepped back! Stella looked like she had finally lost her mind.
"If i can't have you, No one will!" Stella screamed as she took out a body of whiskey and poured it all over herself, than, with a lit match, set herself and the entire warehouse on fire!
Alice and i transformed, untied Mom, and escaped the burning warehouse, just as the police arrived.
Mom explained everything to the cops, while EMS was hauling Stella's charred body, the flames had consumed her, resulting in her death.
As the corpse was being ushered into the Ambulance, Alice held me tight.
"I wish...i could have been her friend..." i said.
"Roxy, Stella was fucked up in the head before she even met you." Alice said, and with that, we drove Mom back home...
Chapter 29- END.
As we made our way to the Warehouse District, i decided that Alice needed to know the truth, she DESERVED to know.
"Alice, there is somthing i need to tell you, but i'm afraid you won't believe me." i said.
"Girl, we live in world where monsters come out of portals and people can transform into beasts, Try Me." Alice spoke.
And so, i explained everything, how i died in a previous life, but the powers of a Time Golem brought me back to the day me and Stella awakened.
Alice, took it wel....
"That egomanical bitch! what monster kills the person that did nothing but help them?" Alice spat.
"Stella was always one to put herself first..." i said.
Alice picked up on this, "Look Roxy, this was NOT your fault, how the fuck would you know that Stella was ploting to kill you, you ain't got ESP!"
"I thought if i broke up with Stella, things would get better, and they did, i met you, and you were the best choice i made ever since i was brought back."
We share a kiss, and continued foward until we found me and Stella's old hangout, Stella owned this particular warehouse, in my past life, i would bring Stella Golden Cores and Elemental cores to help her get stronger.
Once inside, we found Mom, tied to a support beam.
"Roxy! Alice!" cried Mom.
Before we could get to her, the warehouse door slammed shut, and out came Stella, with her were two other girls, mostl likely street thugs.
"Here we are Roxy, tell me, this place bring back memories?" Stella asked, "Any feelings?"
"Yes, disgust, anger, self-loathing, stop me when i get to somthing you like." i replied, "Why are you doing this?"
"Why? because you are MINE! i was the only girl that actually wanted to be near you!" Stella snapped.
"Bullshit!" Alice snapped back, "I can name 20 girls off the back of my hands that would love to be with Roxy, you just got to her first."
"I protected you, kept the creeps and scum away from you!" Stella replied.
"You PAID them to leave me alone.." I fired back, "And if i remember, all i was to you was a servant at best, a TOY at worst!"
"And what's wrong with that! to be my plaything was an honnor!" Stella explained.
"You really don't fucking get it, I wanted Love, not Slavery!" i roared, "i gave you my heart and all you did was crush it, smash it, and gave it back to me, expecting a thank you! now i finally found the right person to give my heart to, and you can't handle it?"
"Because you belong to me! do you know who i am? i'm Stella Wester! and i always get what i want!" she roared, hot tears streaming down her face.
And that's when it finally hit me, "You were given everything you ever wanted, or screamed for, nobody ever said "NO" to you, or rejected you, have they?"
Stella looked at me, her tears still flowing from her eyes, i approached her and spoke softly.
"I'm sorry Stella, really i am, but what we had wasn't healthy, I love Alice, we bring out the best in each other, but i'm sure you will find love one day..."
"SHUT UP!"
Me and Alice stepped back! Stella looked like she had finally lost her mind.
"If i can't have you, No one will!" Stella screamed as she took out a body of whiskey and poured it all over herself, than, with a lit match, set herself and the entire warehouse on fire!
Alice and i transformed, untied Mom, and escaped the burning warehouse, just as the police arrived.
Mom explained everything to the cops, while EMS was hauling Stella's charred body, the flames had consumed her, resulting in her death.
As the corpse was being ushered into the Ambulance, Alice held me tight.
"I wish...i could have been her friend..." i said.
"Roxy, Stella was fucked up in the head before she even met you." Alice said, and with that, we drove Mom back home...
Chapter 29- END.
Questions
1. what did you think?
2. What mistakes did I make?
3. how can I improve in the future
