title help

[Chloe_Bear]

hi all my name is Chloe and I'm the author of the currently titled Lilly: Story of aa Girl novel however I would like to make it more eye-catching and have more people reading it and im looking for tips on how to do that such as reworking the synopsis or reworking the title into something new and more eye-catching, any tip is helpful

 

[Moctemma]

I don't know how much you explore magic in the story, but an easy improvement would be "Lilly: Story of a Magical Girl"

 

[Chloe_Bear]

I don't know how much you explore magic in the story, but an easy improvement would be "Lilly: Story of a Magical Girl"

Magic is a BIG part of the story I'm just trying to explore better titles for the story because its basically about a trans lesbian witch and a dark coven planing from behind the scenes to use her for their own plans

 

[Moctemma]

Also you haven't put spaces between paragraphs, add another "enter". Your story looks like this (it's worse on the phone)

And is easier to read like this.

 

[Chloe_Bear]

I reformated the first chapter, see if its any better

 

[Moctemma]

I reformated the first chapter, see if its any better

A lot better

 

[BenJepheneT]

My advice would be to read into your novel's theme. What is your novel's primary message? Is it a zero to hero story or is it some epic adventure to get a macguffin? Start from there and you'll find yourself getting a title suitable for your story.