Tips to make my synopsis better

[AngelWrites]

I know it's bad but I needed something. I would like some tips on making on making it more attention grabbing without it being too long or making the story annoying.
Thank You
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1179140/bai-chuns-harem

 

[Worthy39]

I mean, it's about as good as mine, lol. But in all seriousness, I think mentioning a little of his backstory and ambitions would make it a bit more interesting, and choosing a few more articulate words would add some flare and attract more readers. Sometimes though, simple is better. What you wrote gives us a brief summary of the story, enough that if it were a genre I liked, I'd at least check out the first chapter. As long as your confident in your first chapter, a simple synopsis should be okay.

 

[AngelWrites]

I mean, it's about as good as mine, lol. But in all seriousness, I think mentioning a little of his backstory and ambitions would make it a bit more interesting, and choosing a few more articulate words would add some flare and attract more readers. Sometimes though, simple is better. What you wrote gives us a brief summary of the story, enough that if it were a genre I liked, I'd at least check out the first chapter. As long as your confident in your first chapter, a simple synopsis should be okay.

I have no clue why I didn't think to do something that simple lol thnx!