This junior seeks a punishment for his terrible wordsmithing!

[wordsmith12008]

Please advice this junior! Don't care about his feelings.
If he's a sore loser he might even remove his story! So use this chance to clear some garbage from this site!

Unexpected Authority

On the Continent, every child faces the Awakening Ceremony at age seven, a ritual dip in the Holy River that bestows them with an 'Authority'—a power that determines their place in society. Aaron, despite having a weak Authority, lives a life of privilege due to his noble birth. This...

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[laccoff_mawning]

I didn't notice any spelling mistakes or grammer, so you can write English properly. That's always a good start.

It's too early to really state anything about the story as a whole, though.

 

[wordsmith12008]

I didn't notice any spelling mistakes or grammer, so you can write English properly. That's always a good start.

It's too early to really state anything about the story as a whole, though.

Thanks, also I wonder if I should write long paragraphs or short ones like I did going forward. Long ones look more professional and short ones look somewhat amateurish... But they feel more impactful in my opinion.
So what is your take?

 

[Deleted member 266]

Imo the length of paragraphs does not denote the level of professionalism

 

[CharlesEBrown]

Thanks, also I wonder if I should write long paragraphs or short ones like I did going forward. Long ones look more professional and short ones look somewhat amateurish... But they feel more impactful in my opinion.
So what is your take?

Generally should be a mix - use longer paragraphs to set the scene or for the occasional infodump, shorter paragraphs to keep things flowing.

 

[laccoff_mawning]

I think your paragraph lengths were fine. If I had to nitpick, you probably had a few too many one-sentence paragraphs.

You're right in saying that short paragraphs are impactful, but too many of them cause a loss in impact, if that makes sense.

 

[TreasureHouse]

With a thread titled like that I was expecting at least some ecchi

My actual advice is simple: Add more tags. Most readers want to know what they're going to be reading beforehand. Generally, the more tags the better as long as they're accurate.

https://www.scribblehub.com/list-tags/

 

[wordsmith12008]

With a thread titled like that I was expecting at least some ecchi

My actual advice is simple: Add more tags. Most readers want to know what they're going to be reading beforehand. Generally, the more tags the better as long as they're accurate.

https://www.scribblehub.com/list-tags/

Hehe, writing ecchi would basically be revealing my kinks. Not gonna let you all shame me.