This is my first time writing and I need some feedback

[SaynedBread]

This is my first time writing really anything and I need some feedback. https://www.scribblehub.com/read/1352900-the-wandering-spirit/

I will probably make a better synopsis some time, if I figure out how to write good ones.

 

[GrotesqueHeaven]

Hey, i have read the first chapter. It looks nice, but few small things that i would mention:
- Your characters talk in [ ] which is slightly confusing at the start. I mean most authors just use " " but I get what is the reason of the way you did it, so you could state 'who' says that.

- " She brushed away the remaining snow from the body and noticed that it was a boy whose age was around her physical appearance. " I may be blind, but there is nowhere stated how old is Snow's physical appearance, so as a reader it does not say anything to me.

That is all I could say from the first chapter. I am not a pro writer and have less than 10k words in my novel, so I don't know if my feedback is any valuable to you.

 

[SaynedBread]

Thanks for your feedback! I didn't even notice that I made the mistake of not talking about Snow's age. I'm going to fix the issue soon.