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Iamnotabot

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(Might on the wrong thread, in which case. Im sorry.)

Female lead gets coerced into an arranged marriage. She accept with one condition, only those can win her in a duel can have the chance to have her hand in wedding her (with god as the literal witness ). She is the strongest sword duelist in the west continent
"So basicly no one can marry her then." Is the throught of her family.

Until the male lead from the east continent came to visit the country, he and she met and have a spar not realizing that by her own rule if he won that he qualify as her grom. So he beat her and the god annouce this news to everyone.

There's 2 route i can go from here, either a family drama where the two have to make their own family accept this marriage. Or make this a slice of life arc for the two where they slowly learn what's living this life of a couples feels like.

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2nd one. Family drama is just annoying. Even better if it's an accidental win and both sides agree that it shouldn't count, but the deity says "nope, ya married now"
 

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Would say 2 since drama between family can be pretty annoying. Option 2 is also a bit ehh if we consider how overdone the genre is but can still be good depending on the style you are approaching it
 

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Make it so that the boy doesn’t want to marry her at first which hurts her pride and makes her actively pursue him To show him how wrong he is.
 

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Make it so that the boy doesn’t want to marry her at first which hurts her pride and makes her actively pursue him To show him how wrong he is.
Im planing on a sub plot, some of the royal family member feel insulted by the presence of a eastener that can win fmc over (they did try to court her but failed). So they come to duel with him(it's not out of ignorance or insecurity that they dislike mc, it just that they have not heard of any major achievement he had and rightfully curious of his intentions.)
 

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I think 2 is better for one of the reasons being that there's not much room for family drama, after all if you tie who can marry you to whether you win or lose a duel then there is really no room for family to start drama over it unless he really just got lucky in the duel.
 

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Family drama is annoying. Unless there's avery good reason for it (yours is fine) then I wouldn't want it to take up much of the story. If it's something happening sort of in the background, like something put to the side while the two learn about each other etc., then it's perfectly fine.

Also please don't make her easy.
 

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Family drama is annoying. Unless there's avery good reason for it (yours is fine) then I wouldn't want it to take up much of the story. If it's something happening sort of in the background, like something put to the side while the two learn about each other etc., then it's perfectly fine.

Also please don't make her easy.
What'chu mean easy ? Mc had to fight his way to the west already before fighting her. Or do you mean easy as in she accpeting the marriage easily ? Nah, if mc can beat her is already half the battle :blobthumbsup: :blob_melt:
 

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What'chu mean easy ? Mc had to fight his way to the west already before fighting her. Or do you mean easy as in she accpeting the marriage easily ? Nah, if mc can beat her is already half the battle :blobthumbsup: :blob_melt:
As I understand it, if a woman is called easy in romantic context, it usually means she can be easily charmed or she easily falls in love, but also can be easily won back over after an argument or something. Depending on the person, it's either seen as a good point or a bad point - it can be portrayed as cute or endearing or funny, but it's arguably unrealistic and takes away from the significance of falling in love, plus sometimes they forgive their partner too easily after they did something bad just because of some sweet talk.
 
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(Might on the wrong thread, in which case. Im sorry.)

Female lead gets coerced into an arranged marriage. She accept with one condition, only those can win her in a duel can have the chance to have her hand in wedding her (with god as the literal witness ). She is the strongest sword duelist in the west continent
"So basicly no one can marry her then." Is the throught of her family.

Until the male lead from the east continent came to visit the country, he and she met and have a spar not realizing that by her own rule if he won that he qualify as her grom. So he beat her and the god annouce this news to everyone.

There's 2 route i can go from here, either a family drama where the two have to make their own family accept this marriage. Or make this a slice of life arc for the two where they slowly learn what's living this life of a couples feels like.

Your input ?
Both
 
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