Sci-Fi Synopsis Feedback

[LukeBarnes]

Hey everyone, there is a story I've been working on for a few weeks now and I would like to get some opinions regarding the overall synopsis. Do you think it's engaging, interesting, or even revealing enough? I'd like to think that a shorter synopsis makes it less of an info dumb, but is that enough to catch the reader's interest?

Here it is:

When Leon is diagnosed with terminal brain cancer, he goes into cryogenic sleep to wait for a suitable treatment to be discovered. What he didn’t expect, however, was to wake up more than 130 years later to a changed world.

Gone are diplomatic governments and independent countries. Now, mega-corporations and social status determine your worth in this new order.

And Leon clearly got the short end of the stick.

His disease might be cured, but now there is a whole new type of cancer invading his life. The only difference is that there might not be another way than to face it head-on.


The story is called Frozen Ember and the synopsis reveals enough for the first volume but doesn't go much into detail to tell about events, characters, or deep world-building. Please tell me your thoughts. Thanks.


Frozen Ember

 

[StoneInky]

Hey everyone, there is a story I've been working on for a few weeks now and I would like to get some opinions regarding the overall synopsis. Do you think it's engaging, interesting, or even revealing enough? I'd like to think that a shorter synopsis makes it less of an info dumb, but is that enough to catch the reader's interest?

Here it is:

When Leon is diagnosed with terminal brain cancer, he goes into cryogenic sleep to wait for a suitable treatment to be discovered. What he didn’t expect, however, was to wake up more than 130 years later to a changed world.

Gone are diplomatic governments and independent countries. Now, mega-corporations and social status determine your worth in this new order.

And Leon clearly got the short end of the stick.

His disease might be cured, but now there is a whole new type of cancer invading his life. The only difference is that there might not be another way than to face it head-on.


The story is called Frozen Ember and the synopsis reveals enough for the first volume but doesn't go much into detail to tell about events, characters, or deep world-building. Please tell me your thoughts. Thanks.

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Frozen Ember

I do not read sci-fi, (it's a genre I think better suits a visual medium), but the synopsis looks pretty good. You establish the setting, the protagonist, and what the story is going to be about. And whole new type of cancer? What is it? You have a hook.

It does feel rough, but I think you should keep that. If you polish it too much, it might feel AI.

I think it's fine. One for.