It's fine if you're lookin for feedback, but be careful not to let what you get dictate your writing; adjust if you think the suggestions are genuinely good, but make sure to carry through with your vision for the story.
I'll give it a read-through, but at a glance—try cutting down on your synopsis.
The point of it is to get a reader interested in the story before they start reading; it's a bit too wordy as-is, and people just glancing at the story aren't going to spare the attention span to read through it (TLDR: the lengthy synopsis can deter new readers).
I also think it's just good practice, since being able to create a strong synopsis means that you, as the writer, have a clear intent for what you want your story to be—which will naturally improve your ability to tell that story.
