Request feedback on my story

[Zenomew]

Hi I have been working on a new for a while .I'd really appreciate a feedback on it just to see if there's something I'm missing about why it's not gathering enough views.

Tenkan book 1 The Twins of Time

If you had all the time in the world Do you still want to live a normal life? Do you feel like since I have superpowers I don't need to work and do other boring stuff like homework I would suggest dropping this story and pretend that you never saw...

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[CharlesEBrown]

Well, a lack of views might stem at least in part from the synopsis - it just does not grab attention, really.

Am I safe in assuming English is not your primary language? Some of the passages read like direct translations with no nuance. It is not bad, really, and there are some great moments, but there are also some oddly constructed passages that occasionally seem to just ramble on for a while.