Request feedback on my Novel.

[OscarTlau]

I just release a new chapter to my novel and would like some feedback.

My current Novel:

Chronicles of the Scarlet King: Brotherhood.

In an universe ravaged by a relentless demonic invasion, Earth is on the brink of annihilation. Victor Williams—an elite soldier of the Apex Operatives, who yearns to find a valid purpose other than war, finds himself nearly dying by the hands of an arch-demon. Saved by a mysterious figure,...

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Let me know how it reads?

 

[Zenomew]

I'll see

 

[OscarTlau]

I'll see

Thanks a ton for your feedbacks, i will remember those flaws. As a beginner, those criticisms are gold mine and I will make sure fill the plotholes and repetitions in some way.