Read my novel (the Hidden Wolf of the murim) and give feedback

[Banti]

Hello readers,

My name is **Banti**, and I am a college student who enjoys reading stories in my free time. Over the years, I have read many **manhwa and web novels**, especially stories filled with action, fantasy, martial arts, and character growth.

After spending so much time enjoying those worlds and characters, I started thinking:

*Why not try creating my own story too?*

This novel is my attempt to build a world inspired by the stories I love, mixing action, fantasy, comedy, and emotional moments. The journey of our protagonist, reborn in a martial world, is meant to show growth, struggle, revenge, family bonds, and the slow path toward strength.

I hope readers can enjoy this story the same way I enjoyed reading many others that inspired me.

Thank you for reading and supporting this journey.
I didn't know how to draw so i make The novel Cover With ai,
— **Banti**

 

[Fairemont]

You forgot a link.

Title: 4/5
Decent title. Sets expectations. Lacks some sort of oomph to really set it apart. More function than flair.

Cover: 3/5
AI covers get mixed response. They don't bother me. Overall composition is okay, but I am not sold on the feature character on the cover being what appears to be a toddler. That might hurt your viewer draw down the road. The title text is legible and pops. The text at the bottom is cut off, so it feels a little sloppy.

Synopsis: 1/5
The synopsis is what gets you readers. You want to make them curious, excite them, or give them another reason to actually open the first chapter. Your synopsis does nothing of that sort. It tells us a bit about you as the author, but that won't get you readers. You need something to tell prospective readers what they are getting into.

Tags: 1/5
You're underutilizing tags. You have 5/25 possible tags on there. Tags are how people find your story. Your story has Murim in the title but you don't have a martial arts tag?

Chapter 1-3: 4/5
I had really mixed feelings. Your grammar is pretty good, so there aren't many errors. It is pleasant, and even fun to read the prose, but by Trogdor, that is some threadbare writing. I read all three chapters in under two minutes.

So, it is fun to read, that is good news. There is something charming about the general presentation and characterization. However, many readers who see such brief chapters may turn away from it.

Your style is minimalistic to the Nth degree. That's not necessarily a bad thing if you do it well, and you do it reasonably well. However, you might be a little too minimalistic to find success. If you're not looking to make a huge name for yourself and write mostly for fun, then you're on a good path because those who do read it will likely enjoy it. If you want to be a big name writer and maybe even make money off of it, you'll need meatier chapters.

Keep up the good work.