Question about oversharing or lore dumping in story?

[VM_Belwynd]

So in this situation, my deuteragonist, is trying to explain the bond to the protagonist. He has been transported to the world, has no history, and suddenly found himself bonded to her.
So my question is if this is too much, just a lore dump? should I just put it in an indirect or summarized dialogue?

“According to legend the first Valkhearth Bond was created after the Shattering,” she began with a low tone and looking down, “No one really knows what the Shattering was about, but it changed the shape of the world. It separated families, clans, and races across the face of the world, killing millions. Some say the gods were angry, others said they warred but no one knows except the gods.”
She then looked up at Killian, “There were five clans of my people that were left in a war torn area afterwards. My people had been a peaceful people and we were slaughtered and enslaved with no mercy by some of the other races.”
“During this time our goddess, Margoria, took pity on us and created the Valkhearth bond.” At the mention of Margoria’s name she felt a slight shift in his emotions. She wondered what this meant, did he know of Margoria?
“This bond was a connection between two compatible souls. It connected them as one person sharing emotions, feelings, experiences, and a part of their stats. It allowed them to fight as one with each other.”

There is more too it, but it is too develop their relationship and understanding of each other. However, I really don't want to write too much more if it needs to be changed in its delivery.

Thanks in advance for any advice.

 

[Juia_Darkcrest]

Sounds fine to me.

It isn't too verbose, so your readers should be able to retain most of it without you having to repeat it later.

 

[L1aei]

So in this situation, my deuteragonist, is trying to explain the bond to the protagonist. He has been transported to the world, has no history, and suddenly found himself bonded to her.
So my question is if this is too much, just a lore dump? should I just put it in an indirect or summarized dialogue?

There is more too it, but it is too develop their relationship and understanding of each other. However, I really don't want to write too much more if it needs to be changed in its delivery.

Thanks in advance for any advice.

Lore dump? Eh... it sounded more like maybe someone paraphrasing a summed up sermon or briefing.

 

[MFontana]

So in this situation, my deuteragonist, is trying to explain the bond to the protagonist. He has been transported to the world, has no history, and suddenly found himself bonded to her.
So my question is if this is too much, just a lore dump? should I just put it in an indirect or summarized dialogue?

There is more too it, but it is too develop their relationship and understanding of each other. However, I really don't want to write too much more if it needs to be changed in its delivery.

Thanks in advance for any advice.

To address your questions, and offer a bit of advice.
First, the advice.
Keep doing what you're doing. It is working quite well.
It isn't too much, or exposition.
It feels like a mentor-figure offering their insight to an apprentice (and thus, to the reader in parallel).

The only tweak I'd suggest, is a result of limited context, so take it with a grain of salt.
Present the lore through questions and answers. Not just explanation.
If the character the speaker is speaking to ASKED first, then the speaker is just answering their questions, and interacting with the querent.
If the lore is being dropped without some form of context, it can hamper verisimilitude and might pull some readers out of the narrative, even when presented in dialogue.

 

[L1aei]

To address your questions, and offer a bit of advice.
First, the advice.
Keep doing what you're doing. It is working quite well.
It isn't too much, or exposition.
It feels like a mentor-figure offering their insight to an apprentice (and thus, to the reader in parallel).

The only tweak I'd suggest, is a result of limited context, so take it with a grain of salt.
Present the lore through questions and answers. Not just explanation.
If the character the speaker is speaking to ASKED first, then the speaker is just answering their questions, and interacting with the querent.
If the lore is being dropped without some form of context, it can hamper verisimilitude and might pull some readers out of the narrative, even when presented in dialogue.

Yeah, I totally agree with the suggestion here; make it conversational.

 

[Eldoria]

What you need to ask yourself:

1. Does your information advance the plot?
2. Does it emerge organically through character interactions?
3. Does it contain foreshadowing for an important plot?

If the answer is yes, then it's not an info dump.

 

[VM_Belwynd]

Thank you everyone for the advice, I will try to split it up into questions and answers more.

 

[babywrath]

So in this situation, my deuteragonist, is trying to explain the bond to the protagonist. He has been transported to the world, has no history, and suddenly found himself bonded to her.
So my question is if this is too much, just a lore dump? should I just put it in an indirect or summarized dialogue?

There is more too it, but it is too develop their relationship and understanding of each other. However, I really don't want to write too much more if it needs to be changed in its delivery.

Thanks in advance for any advice.

I say add more details by having the other person direct obvious questions.

"So... You're horny when I'm horny? I apologize for any inappropriate thoughts and feelings you may experience from this point on. Please, take care of me from now on." bows.
"How much is a part?"
"Can we share skills?"
"Do we have only one soul now?"
"How far apart can we be?"