Posted my first story

[Jihn]

I posted my first story, and I want some feedback in the story comments, please?

Rico Suave - I MADE IT | Scribble Hub

www.scribblehub.com

Tear it apart if you want, say it's good but be honest? Thank you.

 

[Deleted member 45782]

I posted my first story, and I want some feedback in the story comments, please?

Rico Suave - I MADE IT | Scribble Hub

www.scribblehub.com

Tear it apart if you want, say it's good but be honest? Thank you.

congrats on posting your first story.
If i comment on your story, and you're asking for feedback, be prepared. I may point out a bunch of each grammar flaws I find.

 

[Jihn]

congrats on posting your first story.

Thank you, Sea.

Also, I discovered that I can just reply to single quotes by hitting the reply button.

 

[Alkareel]

Congrajuyashuns Juan!

 

[Jihn]

Congrajuyashuns Juan!

Thank you, Gracias!

Someone got the reference :)

 

[Deleted member 45782]

Commented on how the chapter felt
Decent, needs improvement. Work on the transition. Maybe make the line break more visible cause its very subtle to read. After that break in the story, the flow felt a bit disconnected. But not bad, nice writing.

 

[Jihn]

Commented on how the chapter felt
Decent, needs improvement. Work on the transition. Maybe make the line break more visible cause its very subtle to read. After that break in the story, the flow felt a bit disconnected. But not bad, nice writing.

Thanks. I figured how to make the line break more visible. Glad you found my writing nice. I'll see what else I can do to flesh out that part.

 

[Deleted member 45782]

Thanks. I figured how to make the line break more visible. Glad you found my writing nice. I'll see what else I can do to flesh out that part.

good luck on your writings. :)

 

[Jihn]

good luck on your writings. :)

Thank you. You also :)

 

[Deleted member 45782]

Thank you. You also :)