Please could I have feedback my synopsis and story.

[cristigon]

I've been writing my first story for a while now and I think it would help a lot to have feedback on the story and synopsis.

Story link: Blood and Fire: A LitRPG

 

[Syringe]

Since you're focused on worldbuilding, I think something you might want to add to the synopsis is the kind of world it's taking place in. Or at least a general idea. Also, the question at the end "Where will her journey take her?" is answered by the previous sentence about following a path to those that wronged her. She's going to find them, of course!

A better question might be "What will she find along the way?" or "How will she make them pay?", etc.

 

[cristigon]

Since you're focused on worldbuilding, I think something you might want to add to the synopsis is the kind of world it's taking place in. Or at least a general idea. Also, the question at the end "Where will her journey take her?" is answered by the previous sentence about following a path to those that wronged her. She's going to find them, of course!

A better question might be "What will she find along the way?" or "How will she make them pay?", etc.

Thanks for the feedback! Sorry for the late reply though, I’m not on forums much.

 

[Dearest_Violet]

I'd like a more descriptive synopsis if possible, this doesn't give me much to latch onto unfortunately.