SomeRandomApollo
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So. I have 9 chapters and have finally reached the juicy bit. The posted chapters are mainly just the setup filled with hints and backstory that will all come into play later. I have something like over 600 chapters worth of content planned (if I keep managing to go off on tangents that actually end up quite useful for the later story) so the initial longer setup will be more important down the line. however I would appreciate the approach of a fresh readers initial impressions. after all, they don't know about the long term plans :/. I'm not too worried about the content side so much at this moment in time, however, I would appreciate input on the following:
How the dialogue is written. - My biggest concern at the moment.
Are the initial descriptions too long? - I had one person comment on this saying it might be a turnoff for new readers. So am looking for further input from a fresh perspective on this matter.
is the general writing style ok? - I notice while writing that I sometimes flip between past tense and present tense. Does this stick out? Is it obvious now I have asked about it?
Chapter 9. Can you see plot holes? I spent over an hour checking this, but from the omnipotent writers perspective I fear I may have left some glaring questions for the reader (outside of those I had planned).
If you do take the time to give my current 15k words a critical eye, I will say thanks in advance here.
The all important link:
www.scribblehub.com
How the dialogue is written. - My biggest concern at the moment.
Are the initial descriptions too long? - I had one person comment on this saying it might be a turnoff for new readers. So am looking for further input from a fresh perspective on this matter.
is the general writing style ok? - I notice while writing that I sometimes flip between past tense and present tense. Does this stick out? Is it obvious now I have asked about it?
Chapter 9. Can you see plot holes? I spent over an hour checking this, but from the omnipotent writers perspective I fear I may have left some glaring questions for the reader (outside of those I had planned).
If you do take the time to give my current 15k words a critical eye, I will say thanks in advance here.
The all important link:
Flames of Chaos: The Rise of a Goddess
With the flames of war rising once again and the gods of chaos still pursuing destruction, Elyssia is thrown into the middle of it. Elyssia was a young girl from an affluent noble family. With remarkable talent she mastered many skills and learnt whatever she could. With a mysterious heritage...
