New writer here looking for thoughts on my story so far!

[MesaMesa17]

I've always wanted to write my own story and build my own characters, and I finally got down to doing it~

There are only 5 chapters at the moment, but I would appreciate criticism on any aspects that you find to be lacking so I can take those into consideration when writing future chapters!

Broke but Broken: Overpowered in a Fantasy School

Thanks for your time :)

 

[CharlesEBrown]

Only read the first chapter but looks like a very solid first draft (probably better than many of my own).
Some clumsy word usage (for example, is Colleen "petite" - a woman of either short stature or small frame - or does Cadel know she is an illusionist or shapeshifter who only appears to be petite? - if the former, then she is a "petite girl" not a "petite-looking girl"; if the latter, anything goes), but generally seems well done.

 

[MesaMesa17]

Only read the first chapter but looks like a very solid first draft (probably better than many of my own).
Some clumsy word usage (for example, is Colleen "petite" - a woman of either short stature or small frame - or does Cadel know she is an illusionist or shapeshifter who only appears to be petite? - if the former, then she is a "petite girl" not a "petite-looking girl"; if the latter, anything goes), but generally seems well done.

Ah thanks! You're right, I'll take note of my descriptions for my future chapters. Yeah I meant to refer to her as a petite girl