Need feedback/review for my new fantasy novel!

[Niro972]

Just as the title says.

I'd love to hear your thoughts on this one, so gather around and let's get this party started:

God Hunters: Echoes of the Divine

You never asked for a god’s voice in your head. You certainly didn’t ask for the mark it burned into your skin. Now, bound to a god of endings you barely understand, you're pulled into a world of divine politics, heretic hunters, and powers that wear human faces....

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[Humanistheart]

I like your premise and the writing is not bad, but the first chapter is a bit jarring. Not sure how to say it. There's no real description of the scene so one has to care enough to keep reading and piece things together, maybe? Also, the spacing on the sentences is a bit hard. I'd move them together into paragraphs where appropriate. But that's just me. Take it with a grain of salt.

"
But not for everyone.

He nodded subtly toward the bar.

See her? — the woman behind the counter?

Been watching the mark for a while now.

Pretending not to, sure. Wiping mugs, counting coins, the usual bluff.

Most folks wouldn’t give a damn what it is.

The others? They know. They know it means trouble, alright.

Gods hate the thing.

Innkeepers’ wives hate it even more.

Ah. There she is. Look busy."