Need feedback as i am rewriting

MindFudge

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My first attempt at writing kinda flopped due to my terrible pacing and heavy styling. So, after a lot of advice, I decided to restart. However, I'm still not sure if the quality of writing is "decent". I'm no professional, so forgive small errors in pacing and grammar:blob_sweat:
Thanks!

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