My first time writing a story and looking for feedback.

[Unturned_Leafs]

This is my first time writing a story and I would just like to know if theirs anything people like about it/anything I could improve upon,If anybody could give my series a read and then provide feedback that would be quite helpful thanks.

Here is my story

 

[OneRanter]

There is a thread of people giving/receiving reviews here:

Review the story above yours.

Well, there are half a dozen threads where people post their stories to get some feedback or increase activity, but they all turn into graveyards where new stories are posted, only to be ignored. So, I am making this thread to try fix the issue with a rule: 1. Post your story. 2. Read at least...

forum.scribblehub.com

You'd have to review the one who posted before you tho.

 

[Unturned_Leafs]

There is a thread of people giving/receiving reviews here:

Review the story above yours.

Well, there are half a dozen threads where people post their stories to get some feedback or increase activity, but they all turn into graveyards where new stories are posted, only to be ignored. So, I am making this thread to try fix the issue with a rule: 1. Post your story. 2. Read at least...

forum.scribblehub.com

You'd have to review the one who posted before you tho.

Oh thank you.

 

[OneRanter]

Oh thank you.

np ^^ and good luck c:

 

[Unturned_Leafs]

np ^^ and good luck c:

Would you like me to give your story a read and review it as well?

 

[Assurbanipal_II]

Welcome to the world of authors and good luck with your story. You will need it.

 

[Unturned_Leafs]

Welcome to the world of authors and good luck with your story. You will need it.

Thanks

 

[OneRanter]

Tbh I am still kind of scared of reviews D: I saw the thread but didn't post mine because I feel that then I will want to fix everything and I am already procrastinating enough as I am T.T

 

[Unturned_Leafs]

Tbh I am still kind of scared of reviews D: I saw the thread but didn't post mine because I feel that then I will want to fix everything and I am already procrastinating enough as I am T.T

Ah alright I understand.

 

[RepresentingCaution]

I recommend Writing.com or WritersCafe for feedback because they have a point system that incentivises users to leave reviews.

 

[Unturned_Leafs]

I recommend Writing.com or WritersCafe for feedback because they have a point system that incentivises users to leave reviews.

Thank you.

 

[ForestDweller]

I recommend Writing.com or WritersCafe for feedback because they have a point system that incentivises users to leave reviews.

Too bad they don't seem to be receptive to weeb stuff.