May I have your thoughts for my work?

[KuanMigo]

Hello! I just want to know whether my synopsis can 'hook' or 'meh' the potential readers. As for the chapters, well, still two for a moment, but I like to find out if they are fine, are confusing, have too many details, or are disjointed to read. I may have not realized after I wrote and read them.

That's it, I guess. I just want some feedback and advice I need to learn that I missed searching for.

Here's the link to my story: https://www.scribblehub.com/series/414170/ive-become-familiar-as-a-cat/

 

[TrainingArc]

Pilipino ka? Well, first of all, the sentences of your synopsis were too long. Trying splitting it up into multiple parts.

I'm a beginner myself, so take my advice with a grain of salt. Your sentences sound unnatural to me and are way too detailed. I found your choice of words to be weird, to say the least. The overall story seems ok. I barely read Isekai though, so people with much more experience in the genre might not find it as compelling.

That's all I have to say. I hope you wouldn't mind but can you critique my story as well? It's the first story I have ever written don't expect much.

Be honest with my work like I did with yours.

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