Looking for reviews on my novel!

[Takai]

Hi! I recently got interested and started publishing my novel on scribblehub, and now that I see that many people stop reading after my first chapter but those that stayed usually lasted until the second last) i wondered if i was doing anything wrong. I may have deleted my first chapter (Prologue) on impulse so I had to rewrite it
I would appreciate any thoughts and feedback!

Metalloid

Appearing in a cave, Kai quickly realizes he is in a Fantasy World! Reincarnating as a Mythical material, Kai spends his time growing stronger, figuring out the concepts of this new world and learning new abilities! Having gained a unnatural but useful body, Kai makes sure to use it to...

www.scribblehub.com

I hope you check it out if you have time!
Have a nice day!

 

[Jaymi]

It’s normal for people to stop reading after/during the first chapter, it doesn’t necessarily mean the chapter is bad. People just read (or open) the first chapter to see if it’s something they think they’d like. (Look at the first chapter as a tool that filters out readers)

What you should be looking at is how many readers you lose after the first (few) chapter(s) :D

 

[Takai]

Ohhh I see thank you for the explanation!

 

[Kamelingil]

It’s normal for people to stop reading after/during the first chapter, it doesn’t necessarily mean the chapter is bad. People just read (or open) the first chapter to see if it’s something they think they’d like. (Look at the first chapter as a tool that filters out readers)

What you should be looking at is how many readers you lose after the first (few) chapter(s) :D

Oh, that's bad... My novel is a multi-story plot, changes the genre everytime

 

[Lloyd]

Your sentences seems a little poor just at first glance. Stuff like, "Kai could remember everything" should probably just be "Kai remembered everything". It's not a big deal though

 

[Takai]

Your sentences seems a little poor just at first glance. Stuff like, "Kai could remember everything" should probably just be "Kai remembered everything". It's not a big deal though

I see, I'll take note of this when writing my next chapter
Thanks!

Oh, that's bad... My novel is a multi-story plot, changes the genre everytime

Personally, I'm fine with stories like that as long as the main Category doesn't change too much, like Fantasy to Sci-Fi.