Looking for feedback on my story

[VM_Belwynd]

Looking for some feedback on my story, positive or negative, I have no problems with criticism.
I currently have 7 chapters, one being a prologue.
For my current Arc, I plan about 27-30 chapters, and besides the 7 currently written, have another 8 stubbed out.
I am mostly looking for feedback on my writing style:
Am I telling more then showing?
Is there too much detail? not enough?
Am I missing anything that would keep a readers attention?

Right now, I am averaging about 1 chapter a week, but hope to get up to 2.

Verdigris: Hearthara's Champion

Thanks in advance.

 

[DismaiNaim]

I got about halfway through the prologue. Even that was a slog.

You have [some character] talking to [some character], neither of whom have any personality, going through a list of different countries like it's some kind of school lesson. Maybe there's tension buried somewhere in the information overload, but I couldn't feel it.

 

[VM_Belwynd]

I got about halfway through the prologue. Even that was a slog.

You have [some character] talking to [some character], neither of whom have any personality, going through a list of different countries like it's some kind of school lesson. Maybe there's tension buried somewhere in the information overload, but I couldn't feel it.

Thank you.
It is a prologue, so not sure how much character depth or personality I should create, without overloading it, but I can work on that.

Alot of what your saying is in the dialogue, so should I reduce the dialogue and go for more of a showing, to get the character depth an personailty?

 

[FRWriter]

Thank you.
It is a prologue, so not sure how much character depth or personality I should create, without overloading it, but I can work on that.

Alot of what your saying is in the dialogue, so should I reduce the dialogue and go for more of a showing, to get the character depth an personailty?

Without a doubt it's a true clanker. Wish you all the best with the story.

 

[Wamba2K]

Thank you.
It is a prologue, so not sure how much character depth or personality I should create, without overloading it, but I can work on that.

Alot of what your saying is in the dialogue, so should I reduce the dialogue and go for more of a showing, to get the character depth an personailty?

Yeah I would agree. I would suggest finding a way to give the essential information in a more interesting way or just opening straight into your chapter 1 instead. Because your chapter 1 is more interesting at the most basic level because things are happening. But even that is also just character exposition.

This also has a weird ai vibe to it. It's hard to explain why but it just doesn't read right to me. Maybe that's just your writing style and I'm just paranoid. Sorry if I'm wrong.