Looking for an assessment on the first 5 chapters?

[Lmae]

I modified the prologue and want to see if the story flows better and if the hook is clear.
Also what do you think about the mc?

Altered One

As an Inquisitor, Casimir has the pleasure of dealing with Weavers. His so-called intellectual betters, blessed with the power of controlling Aether, the master of all elements. But despite all those years of schooling, so many of them can’t seem to pay their damn licensing fees on time! Jett...

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