Looking for a Beta reader for a Hybrid/Vampire/Littrpg setting. (80% plot, 20% smut)

[Bitter-Enigma]

Hey there,

As the title says, I am looking for a Beta reader to give my story a go.

Summary: The story follows a young, small-statured pickpocket as he gets caught up in a world of the supernatural, with him becoming an agent of Chaos whilst taking advantage and struggling with his supernatural afflictions. It’s a story about an often overlooked and underestimated man as he claws his way to total dominance.
(Dude gets Vampire/Werewolf/Mage/Demon essence in his system over time)

-Slow burn: No instant Chad by chapter 4.
-Elements of Littrpg.
-Cursewords.
-Adult/NSFW scenes are placed into smaller side chapters (Example: So alongside normal chapter 12, you get a NSFW filled chapter 12A), allowing a reader to skip those without fear of missing out on the plot/not wanting to see a particular scene.
-Male lead.

I’ve currently got 16 Chapters ready, all between 1000 and 2000 words. I haven’t uploaded it here, yet because I wanted an opinion on it before hand. So, I’ve got it all in a Google doc document.

I’m mostly looking for a fresh set of eyes on this. Is it entertaining? Is the writing decent? Things you like/hate, etc. I’m fairly confident in what I have written thus far, but I don’t have anyone in my immediate circle to give it a read (Seeing as it contains NSFW scenes).

The link below contains a few chapters to give a glimpse of what to expect.

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/16eGzAqmYsYk-w6-VGWXg2dA7jpHk3Nar?usp=share_link


I'm willing to swap!

 

[Zirrboy]

You could put a comment-access link here.
People not willing to work with you long term might still have valuable things to say about your chapters as of now, and at least I myself would not be too keen on having to announce my assistance before knowing whether I can or want to help based on the writing from a beta-reader side of things either.

The active forum is a minuscule fraction of the main site readership so I think you shouldn't lose much of your fresh start if it is available here a few days earlier, if that was your reason for not putting the piece up to begin with.

 

[owotrucked]

Hi, I'm interested to swap and be each other's beta reader.

I have two illustrated series without many available chapters yet (4 chapters for one, 2 chapters for the other) and I estimate them to be the equivalent of 500 words each.

I'll send a private message with the details, but you can start with sending me few chapters to check if my beta reader feedback fits your expectations. I can read smut btw.

 

[Bitter-Enigma]

You could put a comment-access link here.
People not willing to work with you long term might still have valuable things to say about your chapters as of now, and at least I myself would not be too keen on having to announce my assistance before knowing whether I can or want to help based on the writing from a beta-reader side of things either.

The active forum is a minuscule fraction of the main site readership so I think you shouldn't lose much of your fresh start if it is available here a few days earlier, if that was your reason for not putting the piece up to begin with.

Good call. I’m a bit of a private person, so I figured most people would prefer PM as well.
The link below contains a few chapters to give a glimpse of what to expect.

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/16eGzAqmYsYk-w6-VGWXg2dA7jpHk3Nar?usp=share_link