ln desperate need of feedback

[Leonotis]

Hey just need some feedback on my 1st chapter. When people hear the synopsis of my story they like it enough to click but they aren't reading past the 1st chapter. If I can get some feed back on what is throwing people off on the 1st chapter it'd be appreciated.

Leonotis

Leonotis awakens with no memory in a dying kingdom. Surrounded by cynical kings, deadly hunters and a world-consuming blight, his mission is clear: heal the fractured soul of the tree Orishas. His only hope lies in a mysterious seed implanted within him by a dryad, a gift granting him powers...

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[TheIcMan]

This reeks of AI. Is it?

 

[Leonotis]

This reeks of AI. Is it?

I write a rough draft for a chapter, then I ask Ai to proofread it or find plot holes. I make edits based on if I think its reasoning is sound. I know some people think that that's cheating, but I think of it more as a tool. I remember as a child my teacher was vehemently against Microsoft word's spell check. She thought it was the worst thing to happen and nobody would learn how to spell anything anymore.

 

[Deleted member 206441]

She thought it was the worst thing to happen and nobody would learn how to spell anything anymore.

On this point, she's not wrong, most people can't spell these days.

 

[TheIcMan]

Y'know I really do think people should post befores and afters of their ""edits"" just so we can see the real human work before the slop makes it boring and unreadable.

 

[JayMark]

On this point, she's not wrong, most people can't spell these days.

no it aint. speek 4 urself.

 

[Bartun]

Hey!

Just wanted to let you know, in the chapter 'The Rescue', the text is difficult to read in Dark Mode. It reads just fine in the Default mode, so it might be just a formatting issue.