If you read this would you anticipate the next chapter?

[CakeEatsNothing]

A girl with fluffy and soft looking golden hair sat with 2 other people eating food.

She eat her food while smiling happily.

'Finally I can eat food after so long.' She thought.

One of the men from across the table patted her head with a smile.

"Make sure to eat up all your food."

Although it felt a bit unnatural to her, she didn't understand why so she simply ignored it and kept eating.

Surrounding them were a few children sprawled on the ground throwing up as they curled their bodies up in pain.

But this was also a natural occurrence since she came here so she also ignored this.

After she finished eating the food the two men grabbed her arms and pulled her into the room door behind them.

She always hated this part where they injected small needles into her body. But she didn't resist as they would always give her extra food in the end.

Sometimes she never understood her crazy obsession with food. Was it the need to have something to eat? Was it something she forgot?

Suddenly she felt like ants were biting and crawling inside and outside her body. She tried to scream but all that came out were muffled cries. Tears flowed down her small face.

She couldn't hear. She couldn't smell. She couldn't see.

 

[RepresentingCaution]

I think some people will want to read more. It's not my cup of tea, though.

 

[Eleven_M.A.]

I wouldn't for purely technical reasons, sorry. The italics make the text hard to read. To people with migraine problems, this is an instant turn-off. I got a headache just trying to read it >__<;

Italics are normally used for emphasis, because they stand out from normal text. Seeing most of the text written in italics feels a bit like the entire text is emphasised, which is... Weird, to say the least.

 

[JaxCreation]

Italics are normally used for emphasis, because they stand out from normal text.

Some people use them for flashbacks (which I don't think is the case here since they seem to stop mid-scene?), but I think it's better to just write a transition line and write flashbacks like any other scene because:

The italics make the text hard to read.

Personally, I second Flucket's opinion. For a scene that's supposed to be tense/alarming, it's a bit too simple and repetitive for my liking. Needs more oomph in the descriptions/word choice, imo.