If you have some spare time, please read my work and give it feedbacks

Akasha_

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This is my first work, sorry for the mistakes that I didn't notice, please point them out for me, thanks!!
 

Lloyd

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You switched between present and past tense a few times at the start of the story. You got more consistent with using past tense as the chapter went on.
 
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