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[Nekouni]

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The Enigmatic Knight

Aris becomes the leader of her village's defense force after her brother leaves the position to become a knight in the capital city, where he excels in his duties as a protector. Despite Aris's desire to continue guarding her village, deep in her heart, she harbors a longing to become...

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[Y2N1]

There's not much to say at the moment since nothing has really happened yet, but I like the start. It's also hinted at the start that Aris is going to the capital city, so the start is just about Aris and her decision to become a knight or not.