I need opinions about my pacing.

[Rookieqw]

Hello to all, I hope that you are doing well. One of the main problems with my writing was glacial pacing and too much showing versus telling, which dragged the plot to a halt. If possible, could you tell me if I have gotten better or worse in this department based on my latest chapter?

https://www.scribblehub.com/read/1042505-hordedoom/chapter/1422224/

 

[Tempokai]

Nah, still slow. But this is politics, and politics ARE slow. This is too complex, and OOC, it reads like character dossier first, politics second, and dialogue third. Show, don't tell is still the main prose function. You're trying to ironically lecture about the character, not showing the character in action doing what it needs to do. Dialogue tags slow down the dialogue, as it shows every detail that is not needed for the current context. You need to think about the worldbuilding as context. Ask yourself, "can the reader infer the meaning of the scene if I remove X context?", this is the least I can help with. You have a giant boulder, but that boulder can't fall over because I don't see any momentum that it will lead to the ACTION happening.