I need feedback on the prologue and first chapter

[Goku9819]

Hey guys. I need some help on the prologue and first chapter of this new series I started. From my experience with my previous work it doesn't seem to have the same I am sure this is good feeling.

- V1. Prologue | Scribble Hub

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- V1.C1. His Name is Yogan | Scribble Hub

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[LoneQuack]

Please put your story link in thread description or in your profile signature when requesting feedback.

From time to time I see people make threads requesting someone to read their works and give them feedback on it. This isn't really like a feedback thread like some of the other threads on here. But just wanted to point this out, please, please link your story in your request for feedback thread...

forum.scribblehub.com

How are people supposed to find your story if you don't post it?

Sincerely read this post, and update your own.

 

[Goku9819]

Please put your story link in thread description or in your profile signature when requesting feedback.

From time to time I see people make threads requesting someone to read their works and give them feedback on it. This isn't really like a feedback thread like some of the other threads on here. But just wanted to point this out, please, please link your story in your request for feedback thread...

forum.scribblehub.com

How are people supposed to find your story if you don't post it?

Sincerely read this post, and update your own.

Done so