How's my first chapter?

[BRG]

I want to see if you think it's engaging enough that you would want to read it. I'd also appreciate feedback on my grammar since english is not my first language. Please leave your criticism!

Cursed Hearts

Follow Vine and friends, all of them cursed, as they face fairytale adventures, with monsters that can't be defeated with only swords and enchantments that a kiss can't undo. In the Mourlands, there are some of the kindest people you'll meet, regardless of their species. There’s also murderers...

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[SakeVision]

Nice cover, but unfortunately, not at all. Some instances of weird English aside, there is too much happening with too little exposition.
In other words, I have no idea what is going on, and it all seems like nonsense.

 

[BRG]

Nice cover, but unfortunately, not at all. Some instances of weird English aside, there is too much happening with too little exposition.
In other words, I have no idea what is going on, and it all seems like nonsense.

I see, that's a shame. Thank you a lot for your feedback, I'll try to rewrite it :)

 

[SakeVision]

I see, that's a shame. Thank you a lot for your feedback, I'll try to rewrite it :)

If I were to give some advice, it's not to rewrite, but keep going and write what is essentially your first draft. Then 10-20 chapters in, rewrite them to make more "sense" as a whole.