Help - I wrote a naruto fanfic and need a general feedback 7 k words so nothing much

[comcom-]

First lets start with my reason for even why I started writing an FF instead of an original story. I SUCK AT WORLD BUILDING. So my brain gave me this thought if I suck at one thing let's just skip it. And the other reason is that I am sick and tired of any FF being Chinese translated or a smut and harem fest


So I desperately want feed back about character - building and if am doing it good enough - and if the flow of story can be read smoothly and is not a tell don't show.

I only wrote like 10 k words and published half. But I want to know how to be better so please .

I want to fix my writing before doing my original story

Thank you


Obviously am an amateur and jumped into writing without any building blocks so any advice is appreciated.

https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1623783/the-sleeping-hyuga/

 

[Rezcore]

I'll give it a looksee

 

[TheIcMan]

Took a quick cursory glance at chapter 1.

Whole birth scene was actually pretty neat. Personally would try to avoid using kangaroo, since it looks completely out of place amidst the mystical, magical vibe. The image you set out to make is definitely there, but it just feels weird.

And your dialogue formatting is weird, at least on mobile. Generally for web novels, the blocks don't have any indentations. Just straight lines.