Hello, I am look for feedback on my story.

[V8485]

I would be thankful for any comments on my novel that I'm currently working on.

Novel Link:The Devil Been Isekai | Scribble Hub

I would be thankful for any comments on the novel, and I'm grateful for your time even if you don't comment.

 

[TheVanityWorks]

3.1/10, Make some description in the dialog too, I know who's talking but it's tricky if there is three people talking, it would have been better if you use the dialog script format.